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[Dark_Kairi23]

Destiny Quest

This takes place after KH:COM and before Darkened Hearts' Fanfic Blinded.

Chapter 1:
Kairi sat at the dock. She looked up at the sky.
“Where are they? They’ve been gone too long.”
Sora’s voice filled her memories, “I will always be with you.” She smiled at that. Sora and Riku had gone off somewhere and they said they would be back. Kairi tried to ask where they were going but they left. First, Riku then Sora.
“Where did they go and why?” Kairi asked as if there were somebody there. But what Kairi didn’t know was that there was someone there.
“Follow your heart. It knows all the answers,” a women in a black robe said.
“Ya, I guess…Hey! Who are you?” She surprisingly said.
“That is for you to figure out,” The unknown said as she disappeared into a portal. Kairi got back on her feet and walked to the beach that was right next to the dock. The sun was setting and it was time for dinner.
Kairi said with certainty,”I’m going to find them. No matter what it takes even if I lose my heart again, at least I will be with my friends.” She ran inside and prepared for her quest.

I will get the new chapter. This chapter is short but it was a good place to leave off.

NOTE: These are one of my first fanfic and I have not been writing for a long time.
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[Destiny's Call]

Very nice. But...just a tip. You could make your sentences a bit less choppy if you combined them. For example, the first sentence:

Kairi sat on dock. She looked up at the sky.


You could change that to:

Kairi sat on the dock, and looked up at the sky.

You could also add a bit more detail...like:

Kairi sat alone on the dock, swinging her feet back and forth lazily, and looked up slowly at the bright colored sky.

Other than that, very good. *claps*