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Lanydx reborn

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Really Sorry guys the X-Mas chapter is here.

Lee-Roy: What took you so long.

Zero: Hey just be glad were still here.


Chapter 5 A Christmas tale of joy, comedy and DEATH!
As we rejoin our heroes Lanydx, Zero, Fuzz, Madammina, and Lee-Roy, but not in the normal way we would see them. The dirt road that they were traveling on was covered in an unforgiving snow storm. The trees, rocks, wooden fences, and our heroes themselves were covered in the cold frozen rain. A very irritated Zero was still yelling at Lee-Roy for getting them in this mess to begin with.

“This is the last time I let you take directions." Zero yelled.

The short bronze armored Lilty asked. "How did I know he would lead us the wrong why?"
"Um the fact that he was BLIND!! Really that something I'd expect from Lanydx."
"It is something I really wanted to do." muttered a sad Lanydx sitting on top of the wagon next to Fuzz and Madammina.

The Clavat said to Zero and Lee-Roy. "Come on guys it could be worse."

Lee-Roy gave him the evil eye.
" We are lost, in the freezing snow, most likely far away from any town, and we still need to get two more drops of myrrh before the miasma kills everyone in our village. Unlike you, dumb ass the rest of us have friends and families we want to see living. So tell me dumb-ass how could it be worse?" He asked in a bitter mocking tone.
Soon the small snow turned into hurtful hail. Lanydx pulled out his hood from his wore black coat he packed.

"Like that." He muttered.

Madammina took out her own hood from the fur coat she was wearing and noticed what looked like a house or a hotel to the fork to the left.
"Guys go to the left! There's some sort of shelter!" The Selkie girl yelled while pointing her finger at where she wanted them to go.
After a few hours the caravans made it to what looked like an old worn down three story ski loge. The creepy place looked like it held a monster inside but none of them seemed to care. They parked the wagon and ran for the door.


"This place not only looks like crap on the outside, bu the inside too." Zero muttered. He was right the place looked like it was falling apart.

The vomit green wallpaper was falling off. The floor boards were full of holes, in fact there was a hole in one of the walls. The cough was ripped beyond repair. There also was a claw mark near the fireplace that Fuzz was putting wood in so Zero could start a fire.
Lee-Roy was fuming like the spoiled brat he was. " If you think I'm going to spend the night here, your out of your mind!" He yelled.
Madammina was also not liking this place as well. "Um Zero maybe this isn't the best to be." She said.

Lanydx was only grinning. "Oh come on guys this could be a cool place to have a Christmas party."

Madammina, Lee-Roy, and Fuzz were smiling when they heard the word Christmas . It was the best holiday ever.

"Wait did the dumb ass just have a good idea?" Lee-Roy asked. Fuzz just nodded.

Madammina just gave Lanydx a hug. " Great Idea Lanydx. Let's get started right away.

Zero just went up the stair case. He wanted nothing to do with Christmas. " Idiots." He muttered.
Unknown to the all their was an evil in this loge. It looked at it's victims. It's chose to take the small metal one first.

After Lanydx, Fuzz, and Madammina did most of the work the main room looked somewhat livable. Fuzz put up the lights, Lanydx used his axe to chop off a tree. and Madammina fixed it up with some red and green glass balls.

"Man Lee-Roy should at least help a little bit." Lanydx.

"Where is he anyway?" Madammina asked.

The moogle just stated. " Hot tub."


A few rooms away Lee-Roy was enjoying the heated bath water.
" Ah back to my life, and the slaves are setting up everything-Wait why is this cold? I told the moogle to heat it up! Grr I'll ki-wait who the hell are- " The whole room was frozen thanks to an icy hand. Lee-Roy was no more



Up on the third floor Zero was reading in what looked like a library. Zero put down the book he was reading in shacking fear. The Yuke ran down the stairs to warn the others that they were in deep shit. " Must save idiots and hot girl." Zero muttered. But soon He was quickly frozen. by the same hand.


Lanydx ran with Fuzz to the kitchen. It was one of the few room that looked fine. Lanydx went into the freezer to find a ham.

" Wait Fuzz did you lock the door?" he asked.
"No." Fuzz said scared.

They both turned their heads only to be frozen solid
Madammina was getting worried. "Great Zero's gone, Lee-Roy's gone, and now Lanydx and fuzz are missing. WHERE ARE THEY!!" The Selkie yelled.
"Right here." mockingly said a cold voice.

She did a flip backwards and looked at a white hairy snow man with her now frozen friends.
"What did you do to them?" She asked shocked.
The snow mad walked closer to the girl.

" Made them mine. Would you like to be next?"
Madammina took a step back and a pulled out a rocket launcher she "Bought" from the little Chinese man with a Japanese ascent.
"No thanks!" She yelled as she pulled the trigger and blasted the snowman to bits.

Everyone was now unfrozen. Madammina just smiled.
Later they gave each other gifts and bonded as a team and even as friends.
The end.
 
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Alright, let us know when you edit it!

(I hope I'm not going to get killed)

Er... slow down, more description, but still.. nice work.
 

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Lanydx: Thanks MM.
Fuzz: Kupo.
Zero: What Lanydx is your fav character? I'll kill you Lanydx!!
Lanydx: AH!! RUN!
 

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1. for Mna!
0. Zero.
0.Lanydx.
0. Lee Roy
12. Fuzz (How?)
I'm keeping score who get the most gets the next file chapter.
 

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Wow, this story is something else entirely. I haven't ever played that Final Fantasy game. I've actually only played FFVII and FFVIII and I didn't play final fantasy 8 for very long before I gave up on it. Final Fantasy VII was just the greatest of all the games I've played.

But anyway, I really like it. It's not hysterically funny but there are a lot of parts that made me snicker. My favorite part so far was the scene with Chuck Norris. But see, I was thinking that after he comes and saves them:

(Quote: Suddenly in boom of thunder the mighty and powerful Chuck Norris swiftly kicked the crab so hard, it went flying into the sun. None could speak. Chuck Norris vanished out of then air) I really think that what would make it funnier (to me, anyway) is if you put in there something like,

'Fuz looked over at Chuck Norris and exclaimed, "Thank you Mr. Chuck Norris!" To which Chuck replied, "Everybody gets one." And with that, through his thick and roughed up bearded chin, his other fist sprang out and ripped through the fabric of existence and he jumped through it and was gone in a flash!'

I know it's a little much but I do believe that's a lot funnier and more descriptive to me. I guess maybe because I wrote it but whatever. I think that if you wrote something like that, it would add a more in depth and random notion to your scene. At least that's what I think.

Loved the christmas chapter. It was intense and I was on the edge of my seat! I love the suspense and if you were trying to get that across, you did a damn fine job!

Overall, I'm enjoying this story an awful lot and I'm anticipating the next chapter and of course, the next file. Hmm...I think you've given me an idea. ::thinks::

And like the others said, more description and a little more spread out on the quotes would be good. Honestly, I think it would be easier to read without giving a new line to a character when they speak. But that's just me talking.
 

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I keep all your stuff in mind. As for the next file it goes to the blue hair writer thief Madammina. I would write now but I'm sick.
 

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File: The Writer's birth.

Ten years ago in KH Insider Village in the Selkie's part of the village whick was up north to the rivers were the fishermen and artist did their livings. The rugged race of blue yellow,silver and light purple haired fur nomads were thieves with their own lore and code of honer. The other races of the world did not trust the Selkie people and even in KHInsider Village the Lilties, Clavats, and Yukes were still weary of the them.

On one of the fishermen boats, one of the most respected man of the Selkie members of the village Don S.Holden was busy pulling up the fish he caught next to his only daughter Madammina. His tall posture was covered with a head of long curly silver hair and a blue fur coat and fur tight pants. He was the one man to go to for advice on stealing.

After five hours of fishing the two headed for dry and and walked away from the ship to their home. Soon Don and Madammina was faced with two male Selkies. "Mr. Holden should we steal from old people or kids?" they asked. He replied. "Sure easy targets." The two asked again. "Then should steal from our other tribe friends?" Don muttered. "Oh course! What good are friends if you can't steal from them. Look guys I'm kind of in a hurry so beat it. They left.

After dinner The young Mina looked at her Mom and Dad as if she wanted to say something. "Yeas Dear? Her mom asked. Mina asked. " Mom, Dad can I learn how to read and write?" Don and Nicke looked at their daughter oddly until her father answered. "No." "Why not?!" Mina yelled. "Now Mina if your father says no then that's that." Her mother said. Madammina banged her fists on the stolen wooden table. "It's not fair . I do everything you ask, I even steal for the both of you and never once asked you for anything." She yelled. "Tough crap I'm your father so deal with it Your lucky I don't sell you. " He growled. Mina ran into her room and cried all night long. Her mother smacked Don in the back of the head. "What?

The next day Mina ran from the Selkie's part of the village to the Clavat part. She wandered into a tall, large building. It's to giant doors were made out of crystal in the shape of Jesus Christ's face. The Church. She walked in to the main room. It was full of people praying. The windows were glass stained pictures of people from the Bible. She sat on one of the chairs. looking at a little red robbed Yuke leave the church a young brown haired Clavat who was helping a old lady Yuke get up. Mina found what she was looking for at the bottom of her feet a bible and a pen. She picked it up and quietly walked to the door hoping nobody would notice her. "Going somewhere?" asked a tall brown haired Clavat. His hazel eye was looking at her with understanding and hope. "Oh um well sir I um." Mina tried to think of something. "What oh you can talk to old Lanydx. What's on your mind?" he asked. "Could you teach me how to read and write?" She pleaded on her hands and knees. "Sure." Lanydx said smiling. He took her into his own room and got started. Soon Mina was write full out books. L gave her a hug and a book as he showed her the door at dusk. "Son say goodbye." L ordered. "Goodbye." said a young Lanydx. "Bye." Mina said as she ran out.


Today Madammina looked at Lanydx on the wagon. "What?" he asked. "I think I've met you somewhere before this." she explained. "Wait rea- Guys we finally found a town! Zero yelled. " Hey you two let's move." said the Yuke. as they walked into Maw's Pass. "Or maybe I'm just daydreaming?" Mina thought.

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You need to work on your spacing... new character talking = new paragraph. And Mina picked up writing very Quickly.

But it was a fun chapter, and more serious then the other ones. Thanks.
 
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