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Heh, heh ... the girl called "Ami". So much like me. That is because ... IT IS ACTUALLY ME! That is my name and my personality in this story. At last, I finally have a moment to spare to comment on this fan fic. I would suggest to all writers to join a site called Fan Fiction.Net. Great place, and if you want the link, just PM me.

Now I loved where Chenzira just literally had his chin on Ami's (or should I say my?) breasts and his hands(?) on her bum. What a great way to end the chapter. Sorry I didn't get chance to comment before. And as promised, here I am. Besides, 'tis the season to be jolly ...
 

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Yeah, like Ami said jolly... but I'm not Jolly!!! Finals are a pain!!! >.< Yay brothers coming back to my state!! Now if Ami or I can get him to finish this we might be working with something... You said in a couple days like a week ago!! >.<
 

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ooc:........Helloooo? Anybody here? *hears echo and drops suitcases.* Oh well....*pulls out laptop from suitcase and begins to type* It's nice to be alone sometimes.


Chapter 4


*Snoring loudly* UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCH. *Snore bubble pops* HUH! Oh! Wooo wooooooo! Ah, nothing like taking a good nap, eh? I long was i out? *Someone whispers three weeks* HOLY CRAP! I mean...really? Oh, geesh. My old age is catching up to me. *yawns* Ahh, i see you brought some more friends. Good! Because you're going to be wanting to tell all other youngins about this part of the story. Ya know, i don't think you're prepared to know about this part of the story. I don't think you want to be knowin' a lot about this chapter. Go on, get out here. You're still here? Do you realize that hearing this part of the story will seen you running down the street of some spanish country with soiled underwear. I don't think you want that. FINE! I'll tell you about it. BUT DON'T BLAME ME IF YOUR UNDERWEAR GET'S STAINED WITH YOUR SHOCK! In an ancient time, in an ancient place, with ancient words, and very few adjectives....

"Uugh. Man..." I moan to myself. "What a rocky crash." I place my face right into two soft cushy things and nuzzle my face in them. Oh right, those are Ami's... "Breast!" I shout after realizing what i just done. "aahhhh" I stare at them.
"Chen-Chenzira..." I hear Ami gasp.
"Ah, Ami." I try to move my hands but they are under her butt, so I mistakenly rub on them.
"CHENZIRA!" She shouts.
"AMI!" I gasp and push off of her.
"Ow, Chenzira!" She hits the ground.
"AH! Ami!" I say in a apologetic way.
"Jake!" Jake interupts.
"ARGH! JAKE!" I grabb him by the collar!
"um...Chenzira?" He points behind me.
I turn around. "Huh, Ami?"
"Chenzira!" She swings her purse and it crashes straight into my jaw. What did she have in that purse, books? Well no duh, she works at a book store.
I fall into the ground. "owww, Ami..." I whisper.
"Chenzira.....i didn't think that you would be such a basterd." She says coldly.
"WHAT?!" I instantly recover from that hard knock she gave me. "I didn't mean too! It just happened." I try to back myself up. "I'm not a pervert, really. It was an accident."
"What are you talking?" She looks at me. "You were about to hit that boy!" She pointed at Jake.
"..........what?" I say lowely. Did she not just see me cop a feel?
"What are you some kind of bully? Harassing this little kid." She walks over to Jake.
"HARASSING HIM?!!! THIS KID PRACTICALLY IS A STALKER!" I yell and wave my hands around.
"Are you okay?" She bends down to Jake.
"......she completely ignored me." I whisper to myself.
"Yeah, i'm okay. But i think Chenzira's foot hit me on the cheek when we crashed." Jake rubs his right cheek. He was such a faker!
"Aw, let me see." She turns Jake's head and gives him a long kiss on his cheek.
"HYAAAAAAAAAAH!" I shout. "The nerve of that little f*cker!" I growl to myself. "Here i am, going on my first date with Ami and this punk scores a kiss! DAAAAAAHH, THE STUDENT ISN'T SUPPOSED TO SURPASS THE MASTEEEER!" I grip my hair.
"Now...." Ami whispers lowly. "Where were you!" She stomps over to me.
"Huh!" Uh oh, i'm about to get it.
"You said 3:30 and here it is at 4:15!" She points at her watch.
No no no no no no no nooooo! I think to myself.
"I can't believe you would do something like that. Is this how you treat all the girls?" She scolds me.
Right now.....i'm in a little black room, sitting on a stool with a hat on that says, LOOOOOOOOOSER!
"It's not his fault." Jakes walks over to Ami.
"Hm?" She says softly to Jake. How come she's nice to him! I'm the freaking victim here!
"Chenzira was just....taking care of some bully problems, for me." Jake conjures up.
"He was?" Ami asks.
"I was?" I ask.
"Yeah! You know..." Jake walks over to me and nudges me. "Some big kids were messing with me and you came in and taught them a LESSON!" Jake strains for me to take a hint.
"......WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?!" I yell at him and then look at Ami. She is staring at me with those cold green eyes. "I....mean....What are you talking about i taught them a lesson? I gave those punks a detention!" I bawl my fist.
"Chenzira? I didn't know you were a fighter." Ami looks surprised.
I'm not. "I am!" I hate fighting.... "I train all the time!" I'm weak "I'm very strong!" I'm a coward "I'm brave!" Just the other day my sister, Alex, had me in the choke hold. "Just the other day I was teaching my sister, Alex, the choke hold!" I'm bragging. "Though i don't like to brag."
"Hmmmm...." Ami walks over to me and stares into my eyes.
"Uhh...." I get nervous.
"Yepsies. Those are the eyes of a fighter alright." She smiles warmly at me.
"Heh...see?" Everytime she smiles like that....i get warm.
"Although." She grabs my arm and squeezes it.
"ha..haha...ahh" That is the first time i felt her hand. She must really think i'm a hunk.
"You're very skinny to be a fighter." She says.
DUUUN! Why must i always get a slap toward the face. "Well...uh...looks can be deceiving." I say sheepishly.
"You got that right." Jake mumbles.
BINK! I knock him on the head. "It's your fault i'm in this predicament!" I growl into his ear.
"Yeah, well it's thanks to me that she doesn't hate your guts!" He sticks his tongue out at me.
".......i hate kids." I look up at Ami. "So....i guess we aren't going to go grab some ice cream, huh?"
"Of course we are!" She says cheerfully. "I've been looking foward to it all day."
"Re-Really?" I stutter. Ami has been looking forward to spending the day with me. HAYEEEEEEE. I smile wildly.
"What are you so giddy about?" Jake mumbles.
"And how about you?" Ami bends over to Jake. "Do you want to come with?"
"DAHHHH!" I shout. No no no no no! There is no way that this brat is coming along. I glance at Jake and he smiles at me.
"Well..." He ponders.
DACK! I JUST KNOW HE IS GOING TO SAY YES! THAT LITTLE SPEC OF FLY CRAP! I SWEAR I HATE YOU, JAKE!
"Hmmm, no. it's okay." Jake says.
I SWEAR I LOVE YOU, JAKE! I give a little jump.
"Well okay. It was nice meeting you." Ami smiles.
"Nice meeting you two." Jake begins to walk off. "Oh, Chenzira...I almost forgot." he turns to me. "Corri said to come over to his house and get your porn magazines from him."
"ACK!" I freeze. THAT LITTLE F*CKER!"
"Oh, porn magazines?" Ami raises an eyebrow at me.
"OH, well it's not what you think. I just had those because someone gave them to me as a joke...HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!" I force a laugh
"Heh heh, you cheeky boy." Ami begins to walk.
"Huh?" I stare in shock as she walks off. "No slap to the face or scolding?" I scratch my head.
Ami turns toward me. "Are you coming?"
"Oh, of course!" I catch up to her.

The dawn has approached us and fills the sky up with a luminous orange and yellow color. The buildings reflect the twilight off of one another and captures the beauty of the city once again. I swear, i truely love my city. Everyone downtown is either coming from work or coming downtown to relax. Me and Ami stroll through Millineum Park, while we eat our ice cream. Millineum Park was and still is a park located downtown Chicago that is dedicated to art. Someone placed a gigantic, platinium bean in the center of it. No lie, a giant bean.....wow.
"Hmmm." Ami stops too let a cool breeze pass through her. Her hair flows elegantly with the wind. I stare at her with adoring eyes. "huh?" She looks at me. "Is there something wrong?"
"Uh...nothing. Just was day-dreaming." I shake it off. "How's your ice-cream?" I ask.
"It's great, thanks." She takes a lick. "And yours?"
....melting... "It's delicious, a little slippery though." I lick a drip of my ice-cream as it slides on the cone.
"Hehehe. I told you to get a napkin." She giggles.
"Hey, don't rub it in." I smile at her. This is great, My very first date with the girl of my dreams. I bet the gang won't believe this. Actually they don't believe anything.
"Hey, can we take a rest?" Ami eyes a bench.
"Sure." I follow her over to it and sit next to her.
"Um....don't you want to scoot over a little?" She asks. Alright, so i'm on the far end of the bench, where a huge gap is between us, lay off me folks.
"Uh...yeah." I blush as i scoot a few inches from where i was. "Um...better?" I ask while staring at my ice cream.
Ami scoots all the way over to where i'm sitting, to the point where her leg is touching mine. "Much." She smiles.
"uhhh..." I'm choking, i've never been this close to her before. I can smell her perfume....ahhh. "Um...nice...nice weather were having." Oh, like that wasn't used before!
"It is." She takes a lick of her ice-cream.
COME ON! TALK! "I here that it's supposed to go up to 83 degrees tomorrow." I stutter. DAMN YOU! BE MAN!
"Really? Better put something cool on." She says casually. She stares off into the distant.
Damn it, man! You're losing her! Quick, make joke! "Hey, so you uh...want to here a joke?" I mumble.
"Sure!" She turns to me with enthusiastic eyes.
Sweet! You have her on the hook! Now reel her in! "It's spring, and the baby bear comes out of his cave. His knees are wobbling, he's a wreck. He's skin and bones, with big circles under his eyes. His mother says, "Junior! Did you hibernate all winter like you were supposed to?" He says "Hibernate? Shit Ma, I thought you said masturbate!" HAHAHAHAHAHAAA!" I laugh wildly and then look at Ami. She has a confused look on her face.
"......what do you mean when you say masturbate?" She ask.
"ACK!" I almost drop my ice-cream. "Wh-what!" IS SHE FREAKING SERIOUS?! "Well um..it's when you....huh...ya know...um..when you stimulate...uh"
"Hahahahaaa. I know what it means." She chuckles.
"Oh, oooooh, hahahaaa." Phew! Load off my back.
"Hehehehe." She chuckles with me.
Well i guess I just broke the ice. "Heh heh. You kind of got me there." I take a lick of my ice-cream.
"Hey, Chenzira?" Ami says softly.
"Yeah?" I look at her with a smile.
"I'm sorry for shouting at you and then hitting you with my purse." Her eyes fill up with regret.
"No no, it's okay. I deserved that." I rub my cheek. That purse hurt like hell though.
"No, you didn't. I was just stressed out with work." She looks up at me and places her hand on my hand that's on my cheek.
WHOA, JACKPOT! "Uh...it's...it's okay." I'm blushing! I'm blushing to the maximum!
"Thanks." She smiles warmly at me.
"No need to..." AHH! I CAN'T STOP BLUSHING! Her hand is still on mine! "Um...you ready to go?"
"uh huh. Let's go." She stands up and takes me by the hand and we begin to walk off. Hand in hand. JUST LIKE A COUPLE. *sniffs*
It's dark now, and the purplish blue sky is out. I'm walking her home, which isn't very far from me. She lives in a complex that's surrounded by flowers, during spring and summer. When we arrive to her door she stops.
"Well...this is it." She says, looking away from me. Is....is she blushing?
"Yeah..." I blush also. DAMN IT, NOT AGAIN!
"I really had a good time today. It was wonderful." She looks at me with her green emerald eyes that are glowing.
"I'm glad you felt that way." I smile back
"We should have been doing this a long time, ago." She chuckles. Her chuckles combined with her accent, makes her irresistable.
"Yeah, sorry about that." I cheese. There is a long pause between us. "Um...Ami, about earlier with the-"
"Shhh." She places her finger on my lips. "You don't need to apologize." She leans in on me.
HOLY CRAP, HOLY CRAP, HOLY CRAP, SHE IS GOING TO KISS ME! MY HEART IS BEATING, MY HEART IS BEATING....wait, that doesn't make sense. "Um..." I don't know what to do. I guess i lean in, SO LEAN IN! I lean in and she leans in more. Our lips form into kissing mode. WE ARE ABOUT TO KISS! BOOOOOYAAAAA!
"Ami! There you are!"
"ACK!" I almost fall to the ground.
"Where have you been?" Ami's mother, Mrs. Wilson, stands in the door way.
"I was out with Chenzira." Ami turns to her mother.
"Oh, hello there, Chenzira." Mrs. Wilson smiles at me.
"Good evening Mrs. Wilson." You mood killer!
"Ami, your little sister is sick, so you have to do the dishes." Mrs Wilson orders.
"Fine! I'll be there in a minute!" Ami sort of snaps. Mrs. Wilson closes the door.
"Heh, mothers, what are ya going to do." I chuckle.
"Heh, sorry about that." Ami smiles at me. Again, there is a long pause. "Well...i'll see you later." She walks toward her door.
"Ami, wait!" I walk toward her.
"Hmm?" She turns around and is caught by my hug. The wind flows pass us. "Chenzira....." She whispers into my ear.
"Oh!" I jump back. "Sorry!" I don't know what came over me, but i liked it.
"Don't be." She blushes red. "Well....i better start on those dishes." She turns and walks to the door, but turns back to me. "Thanks....for the wonderful time, Chenzira." She smiles, opens her door, walks in, and slowly closes it.
"Yeah....no problem." I say to the door as if Ami can here me. There is a warm feeling in my heart that is making me smile. "Hmmm....i wonder....what's on T.V" I chuckle and slowly, walk home with a smile of accomplishment on my face. Funny thing, the stars our out. It's very rare to see them in the city. Heh, could he be doing this for me? I stare into the night sky. Thank you, Ruin.


*Cries* AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW, WAHHHHHHHHHHH!:cry: So freaking beautiful! *blows nose* I was such a romantic back then! I STILL AM! *wipes tears* You youngins could learn something from my story. No matter who you are there will always be someone out there that was meant for you. Never doubt that, you here me! Now go on now and feel loved, i got to remember the rest of my childhood, i'll tell ya when i do. *Begins to think of chapter 5*
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This Fan-Fic is dedicated to all my loved ones. Thank you all so much.

Millinuem Park
See told you about that freaking giant bean!
 
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The chapter was sweet. It was very nice. It reminds me of why I hate my life at the moment. Hopefully there won't be soo much happiness and love in the next chapter. Also I am having a very hard time believing that there is someone out there for everyone.
 
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