PLEASE TRY TO GET PAST THE HORRENDUS FIRST PARTThis is a fan-fic i made but criticise me please if its bad and if some way its possibly good, then...i dunno but please post and criticise me as bad as possible, i mean this is my first fan-fic.
Prologue
Why me? Why us? Did it have to happen? We were separated, where was he? Our Island, consumed by shadow and everything went black. I woke up in a strange town all too familiar, but foreign at the same time. Now what do I do? This has to be a dream, or, but it feels too real. Where is the happiness I once could resort to when all was lost? Traverse Town, my new home, is where I begin.
She walked out of the alley, her pink hair flowing in the small cool breeze that flowed through Traverse Town. She continued down the road trying to stay focused on her task, to get home and find him. Him, I can’t lose him he’s the only one who ever showed me kindness. She continued to walk her head buzzing with thoughts. She shook her head trying to forget the memories. She eventually turned left and walked into a small house. The house was no bigger than a small classroom with a small bed against the left wall and a quarter filled bookcase on the back wall. The kitchen to her right held a small table for two, three at the most, and held a small vase with a wilting flower. She locked the door behind her and walked to the center of the room, lost in thoughts she began to feel drowsy.
Not all is lost. Don’t give in, to darkness. “I haven’t been getting enough sleep.” She said aloud. Go look for him, the one you seek, you shall chose his fate. “Wtf,” She said chose whose fate? Who is this?” No one responded her cry. Minutes passed and she stood rooted to the center of her room. Eventually the voice returned. Sakura Find him, choose his fate, only one will bring you happiness. Sakura!
Pluto the dog, trotted merrily along, finally getting away from goofy and his stupidity. Pluto reached the entrance to a long alleyway when he heard “Aww man where am I?” Pluto stopped dead in his tracks, he looked down the dark alleyway to see high stacked boxes and barrels. A foot? Wow Goofy’s foot never groaned at me before, then again Goofy is different from the humans here. Pluto trotted along the cold alley, what met his eyes was a young boy with brown spiked hair and big yellow goofy shoes. O my god look at the size of those feet! What are they a size 50? Pluto came close to the boy wondering where he had came from. Suddenly the boy aroused and jumped back in fear of the sudden sighting. Omg its awake. Pluto backed away and ran down the alley turning his head back to make sure he wasn’t being followed. Pluto heard the boy shout for him to come back but Pluto never returned. Sora got up and looked around seeing for the first time where he was. He walked down the alley unaware of what would happen.
Prologue
Why me? Why us? Did it have to happen? We were separated, where was he? Our Island, consumed by shadow and everything went black. I woke up in a strange town all too familiar, but foreign at the same time. Now what do I do? This has to be a dream, or, but it feels too real. Where is the happiness I once could resort to when all was lost? Traverse Town, my new home, is where I begin.
She walked out of the alley, her pink hair flowing in the small cool breeze that flowed through Traverse Town. She continued down the road trying to stay focused on her task, to get home and find him. Him, I can’t lose him he’s the only one who ever showed me kindness. She continued to walk her head buzzing with thoughts. She shook her head trying to forget the memories. She eventually turned left and walked into a small house. The house was no bigger than a small classroom with a small bed against the left wall and a quarter filled bookcase on the back wall. The kitchen to her right held a small table for two, three at the most, and held a small vase with a wilting flower. She locked the door behind her and walked to the center of the room, lost in thoughts she began to feel drowsy.
Not all is lost. Don’t give in, to darkness. “I haven’t been getting enough sleep.” She said aloud. Go look for him, the one you seek, you shall chose his fate. “Wtf,” She said chose whose fate? Who is this?” No one responded her cry. Minutes passed and she stood rooted to the center of her room. Eventually the voice returned. Sakura Find him, choose his fate, only one will bring you happiness. Sakura!
Pluto the dog, trotted merrily along, finally getting away from goofy and his stupidity. Pluto reached the entrance to a long alleyway when he heard “Aww man where am I?” Pluto stopped dead in his tracks, he looked down the dark alleyway to see high stacked boxes and barrels. A foot? Wow Goofy’s foot never groaned at me before, then again Goofy is different from the humans here. Pluto trotted along the cold alley, what met his eyes was a young boy with brown spiked hair and big yellow goofy shoes. O my god look at the size of those feet! What are they a size 50? Pluto came close to the boy wondering where he had came from. Suddenly the boy aroused and jumped back in fear of the sudden sighting. Omg its awake. Pluto backed away and ran down the alley turning his head back to make sure he wasn’t being followed. Pluto heard the boy shout for him to come back but Pluto never returned. Sora got up and looked around seeing for the first time where he was. He walked down the alley unaware of what would happen.
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