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Akuma

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Chapter one

Sora and kari and ricku all walking in traverze town den mickey comes up 2 them "sora the hertless are bak you have to go and kill them!!!"

So riku turns into his dark form and they go to word that wasnt and hertlsess are ther and riku and sora kill them all. then xemnas comes "Sora i am kill you now!"

sora and xemnes fight and he makes lalsers but sora jumps them and kills him and then axel show up and say that the hertless attack hollow garden and then they go there and kill thrm but seproth is ther too.

"sephirth we must fight said sora and they fought but he used sin harvezt and sora use mega potihun and then he kill sephirot den the heratless go away but nobodes come

riku kils all the nobodes him and axel fuse and use big flame move to kill them al but zexion and te chases come and they fight and kill rik and axel and tey go 2 heven. then sora fight them but they end in draw and go away.



chapter 2 soon i hope you like it!!!
 

Ashes Remnant

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Akuma, I am sorry, but this FF seems alot like your "earlier" chat replies. Please though, if you are going to post anything serious, take serious care, and spell correctly. But you seem very creative, and I would llike to see some of your work.
 

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chapter 2

riku and azel are ded so sora goes revive them and then they go fight more heartless sora tell riku "rikue we must beat the heartless!!!"
"No sora u are the heartless rikue say, and sora turn into anti form and kill all heartless then he turn back and they go to the end world

sora kills the big heartlwess and they go through all the world s then ansem is there and he fight them but sora just kill him then they go to home and sora hug kari

"Kari we kill the heartless i love u he say and they kiss

but then nobodies come and they fight them but who send them!!!!????


I say in next chapter keep waiting.
 

Ashes Remnant

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Okay, I'm biting who sent them? Post the next (And hopefully last) chapter...
 

Faith Crest

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First of all, you need to learn how to use proper English. Secondly, your chapters aren't long enough; way too short at the moment. Thirdly, you need to spell. I think you need to go through these before you ever write anymore fan fictions or chapters.
 

snowdog

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This seems like a joke. =/

Anywhom, if you are serious about writing, then you should try to type out your work in MSWord before posting it here. That way, you can have a spellchecker, and there'll be less errors in grammar and such.

Plus, the chapters are too short. You'll have to expand a little on what you're saying.

Good luck in your later works. <3
 
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