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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
Don't worry about it, Sephly; I bet N.Rain is extremely busy in RL as I sent her an message to get knowing to each other and she hasn't responed back yet.
I do want the updated version of it, but I'll be patient, lol.
So, just don't worry about it, friend!
Don't worry about it, Sephly; I bet N.Rain is extremely busy in RL as I sent her an message to get knowing to each other and she hasn't responed back yet.
I do want the updated version of it, but I'll be patient, lol.
So, just don't worry about it, friend!
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
You are very welcome. The praise is deserved I believe. ^^
I can see why the emotional/dramatic parts can be the hardest. Battle scenes are only harder for me to write because I tend to be an emotional person, so it is not as hard for me to write emotionally as it is the describe a battle in which there is constant movement and action.I think the emotional/dramatic parts are hard when I do not connect with a certain character as much, so it is somewhat hard to get in their mindset. Every writer is different, which is a cool thing about writing. Your's seems very well rounded in all areas, but of course there is always room for improvement.
Braig does seem like a fun character to write. I have never gotten a chance to really write him into any of my writing. I stopped my fanfiction writing before I introduced him. Of course that was years ago before Braig was really in KH. Just Xigbar.
I understand that completely. Having all the characters and building upon them makes the story more dynamic and interesting. Not to mention it can be really fun to write all those characters.
The transitions are smooth enough for me. I am not having trouble following at all.
For me the balance between emotions is very important, and I love having a wide range of them. So I am very glad you consider those things.
Also, I would be happy to beta/proof-read any chapters. I know it is hard being busy in RL. I have never beta-read fanfiction, but I am certainly willing to read through your writing to check it.
Oh hello there new reader, nice to have you around.
Yea, sometimes I am astonished myself how popular this story became. 14 pages already...wow.
Thanks for all that praise, makes me really happy. ^__^
Battle scenes are for me the second most difficult to pull off. The most difficult for me are the emotional/dramatic bits because of the delicate balance that has to be kept so it isn't too few or too much emotion as well as to keep in mind the involved characters personalities so I don't make them too OOC.
I certainly hope that I got better since the prologue, haha, if there would be no improvement at all there would be something wrong with my ability to learn. *ggg*
I've already stated my favorites a bit earlier, yet Braig is really someone who stands out because he's ridiculously funny but also "evil" and ruthless. It's quite satisfying to write him.
As it's a primary premise of the story the many characters will continue to be addressed and there are of course still some who have not been introduced yet, that's what mainly contibuted to the enormous length of the story but I would not have it any other way. ^___^
The switching between locations is of course also a result of having that many characters, but I hope it can be followed nonetheless.
If the plot brings forth that range of the emotions I'm doing something right, as I do want the sad and dramatic parts to have some counterbalance with slight comedy even if it is mainly a drama/adventure story.
Well, as it stands right now I have not heard anything from November Rain the whole week. So there is no beta-read chapter available for me to post right now...;__;.
There are only two options now: I can either wait until I get the fixed version or, if the demand is really high, post the raw version as a tentative release.
You are very welcome. The praise is deserved I believe. ^^
I can see why the emotional/dramatic parts can be the hardest. Battle scenes are only harder for me to write because I tend to be an emotional person, so it is not as hard for me to write emotionally as it is the describe a battle in which there is constant movement and action.I think the emotional/dramatic parts are hard when I do not connect with a certain character as much, so it is somewhat hard to get in their mindset. Every writer is different, which is a cool thing about writing. Your's seems very well rounded in all areas, but of course there is always room for improvement.
Braig does seem like a fun character to write. I have never gotten a chance to really write him into any of my writing. I stopped my fanfiction writing before I introduced him. Of course that was years ago before Braig was really in KH. Just Xigbar.
I understand that completely. Having all the characters and building upon them makes the story more dynamic and interesting. Not to mention it can be really fun to write all those characters.
The transitions are smooth enough for me. I am not having trouble following at all.
For me the balance between emotions is very important, and I love having a wide range of them. So I am very glad you consider those things.
Also, I would be happy to beta/proof-read any chapters. I know it is hard being busy in RL. I have never beta-read fanfiction, but I am certainly willing to read through your writing to check it.
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
Huh, after overcoming some difficulties with both of my computers and a big pile of school assignments in these last two weeks I'm finally ready to continue with this project~ *u* Terribly sorry for the delay~ but I'm glad to see we have some impatient and enthusiastic readers here.
Yeah, that's what I enjoy in this fanfic as well. Kairi was taken with them instead of just leaving her home. I would think it would have been easier for you as you wouldn't have so many characters interacting with each other simultaneously. But yeah, like I said, I like this decision.
Hoping that as well. *3* As long as my school work doesn't become overwhelming, I think I'm able to work on this for quite a while~~
Haha, yes, it's quite hard to try to put yourself into a position of someone who is 10 years younger than you and then have your mind set to that level as well.
It's a challenge but I think you have overcome that challenge quite well so far and you probably continue to do so in the future as well (I mean I don't see a reason why you wouldn't haha).
Haha yessss, I think I know who the missing three are now that I have read chapter 28 through. Or I think I know, I might be totally wrong in this case, haha.
I'm sure they're time-consuming to make but I love the effort that you put into this! And I think it makes it easier to follow for a reader when you have some character charts.
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And now on to the chapters 26 and 27 that I have yet to comment~
Chapter 26, chapter 26... where do I begin with that, haha. Really didn't expect that when I first got to read it. It was so heart-breaking. That Aqua and Terra moment in the end ... must be one of my favorite parts in the story. And I loved that you included the dialogue from the game in there as well. One of my favorite things in this chapter for sure.
I also like how you portrayed Riku's feelings and emotions while following the conversation with Terra and Xehanort. They were greatly written I must say.
In chapter 27, I like the interaction between Riku and Terra a lot. Too bad that it has to be so short but it's understandable. For story purposes and all. I believe that we will see interaction between them a lot more in the future, or at least I hope so. ;3
It's great how you make the end of the chapter so intense but then you add a great spice in there with descriptions of Sora and Riku's feelings. Roxas being one of my favorite characters in the whole series, I like how Sora is worried about him. Roxas needs more love~ haha.
Anyway, it's nice to continue to chapter 28 now and see what Kairi is up to~
Huh, after overcoming some difficulties with both of my computers and a big pile of school assignments in these last two weeks I'm finally ready to continue with this project~ *u* Terribly sorry for the delay~ but I'm glad to see we have some impatient and enthusiastic readers here.
Ah, I see. Well personally I enjoy chapters with darker and sadder themes a bit more (although I do enjoy fighting as well (really who wouldn't?)) so can't say I'm complaining in that department. c;
Yeah, that's what I enjoy in this fanfic as well. Kairi was taken with them instead of just leaving her home. I would think it would have been easier for you as you wouldn't have so many characters interacting with each other simultaneously. But yeah, like I said, I like this decision.
Yesss, improvement is good. *u*~Yep, but still true.
On one hand it's nice to see someone say to me (in a certain manner of course): Hey, you wrote nonsense here, that can be written better!, lol, since it helps improving. Yet it's also always the most entertaining to me when readers theorize and wonder about the plot. *ggg*.
Indeed, in essence you are always a tad ahead of the other readers and I hope you stick with this great project.
Hoping that as well. *3* As long as my school work doesn't become overwhelming, I think I'm able to work on this for quite a while~~
Yeah, that is true in his case.
Haha, yes, it's quite hard to try to put yourself into a position of someone who is 10 years younger than you and then have your mind set to that level as well.
It's a challenge but I think you have overcome that challenge quite well so far and you probably continue to do so in the future as well (I mean I don't see a reason why you wouldn't haha).
Hmm, really interested to see what those personal reasons are but I guess the story will tell in the future. And it shouldn't take too long either I presume, hmmhmmhmm.Mickey will indeed become a major player in the whole struggle, soon to be also out of personal reasons in additions to those I already mentioned.
The King is after all one of the "Major 13", the group of thirteen characters which hold the most importance in the story not counting the main villains.
In fact, by now nine of the thirteen majors are already revealed, and next chapter will already be the next.
I have already set up the "character rosters" for the prologue and chapter 1 with the Major 13 as pictures, and here's the status we have right now:
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These pictures take ridiculously long to make, but I want to someday make also one for the antagonists, the neutral party and the support characters, lol.
Haha yessss, I think I know who the missing three are now that I have read chapter 28 through. Or I think I know, I might be totally wrong in this case, haha.
I'm sure they're time-consuming to make but I love the effort that you put into this! And I think it makes it easier to follow for a reader when you have some character charts.
Hmm~ Can't wait for that chapter 33 then. But it isn't too far away haha. 4 chapters to go. c:<
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And now on to the chapters 26 and 27 that I have yet to comment~
Chapter 26, chapter 26... where do I begin with that, haha. Really didn't expect that when I first got to read it. It was so heart-breaking. That Aqua and Terra moment in the end ... must be one of my favorite parts in the story. And I loved that you included the dialogue from the game in there as well. One of my favorite things in this chapter for sure.
I also like how you portrayed Riku's feelings and emotions while following the conversation with Terra and Xehanort. They were greatly written I must say.
In chapter 27, I like the interaction between Riku and Terra a lot. Too bad that it has to be so short but it's understandable. For story purposes and all. I believe that we will see interaction between them a lot more in the future, or at least I hope so. ;3
It's great how you make the end of the chapter so intense but then you add a great spice in there with descriptions of Sora and Riku's feelings. Roxas being one of my favorite characters in the whole series, I like how Sora is worried about him. Roxas needs more love~ haha.
Anyway, it's nice to continue to chapter 28 now and see what Kairi is up to~
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
No need to be rude, Roxas. uou A lot of writers are dealing with school and work right now, you'll see it in due time.Bring me Chapter 28 right now!! -pouts-
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
I didn't meant to be that rude, Annoyance.. Sorry.
Maybe if teachers didn't give too much work, we could read the stories more, lol.. but knowing teachers, that will never happen.. *shifting eyes back and forth*
I didn't meant to be that rude, Annoyance.. Sorry.
Maybe if teachers didn't give too much work, we could read the stories more, lol.. but knowing teachers, that will never happen.. *shifting eyes back and forth*
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
Yeah, some people get swamped unfortunately, but yes, that's just a warning, but don't feel the need to pressure the writers to update. It's up to them when to prioritize it.
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
Yes, Madam!! *bows down on my knees*
Yes, Madam!! *bows down on my knees*
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 27 posted)
Ok, this is gonna be some long post, lol.
Just to shoot that out beforehand: I will be working in the improvements to the next chapter after I answered all these comments, so you can expect the new entry to be up eventually. ^___^
Yes, at least he will be until he can be reborn as his own person. After all, he does have a heart. Then hopefully all those idiots always painting him only as Sora or say he is Ventus will finally shut up.
Roxas is Roxas, and no one else! Sora himself even says so...
Exactly, they even left Vanitas' fate in the end of BBS pretty open to interpretation in terms of what exactly did happen to his consciousness and his dark heart in the end.
After all the shit that took place and what Vanitas put him through (and him also very unwilling to fuse their hearts in the first place) I would not be led to believe that Ventus would take Vanitas into him willingly at any point.
Alright then, I do hope though that I get the chapter soon. It would be neat if I could slowly get to maintain the proposed schedule which seems to get better now.
Geee, thanks, I'm flattered. <3
Yeah, seems we are on opposite ends on how easy we can write certain scenes, although I won't say by any means that battle scenes are easy, lol.
It's funny as in order to "get" into characters I tend to re-watch parts of the series where they appear in and also take in the descriptions of their personality in order to come up with a decent response for a certain situation. When writing on HiU, I also tend to listen to appropriate soundtrack pieces every time to get into the mood for a scene, like i.e. in the Prologue I listened to "Destiny Islands" as well as Sora's and Kairi's themes when their focus parts came. Destati and Fragments of sorrow for chapter 1 when inside Sora's heart, Roxas' theme for the parts where he remembers his life or "The other Promise" to his fight with Ven.
While writing about Ventus' pain-trip during the chapters 9 to 11 I constantly listened to an extended version of Ven's theme and Aqua vs. Sephiroth was underlined by "Advent - One Winged Angel", the music from FF VII Advent Children Complete.
I see, lol. Braig is mostly just so fun to write because he's such a goddamn troll who manages to fed people up. That's mostly why I paired him with Isa for their mission as their personalities really clash and give food for some wonderful scenes. I especially like the scene when Leon throws the door into Braig's face in chapter 21 and Isa's sniding remarks getting back at his constant trolling.
Nonetheless they still form a formidable villain duo, don't they?
Yep yep, that's exactly one of the reasons that motivates me to go even further with this long snake of a story. It's also intriguing to let characters interact who did not yet actually meet in the games or only had some few minutes of screentime together.
That's good to hear I get this right. My biggest concern was that I would make things too confusing and hard to follow.
If I wouldn't consider it many of the characters would go pretty OOC very fast, which is always a sign of bad writing except if we are talking about a parody or comedy story.
Many thanks for the offer, although I think having too many betas/proofreaders would result in misunderstandings somewhat fast.
I have November Rain for the stuff here at KH Insider, starting with chapter 18 while I have another person for the FanFiction.net version.
Nice you would want to help though. ^__^
Yep, it's somewhat funny to have some impatient readers, lol. Only shows it's gaining some popularity though.
Then you'll be much satisfied later on as it gets much darker and sadder later on.
Of course it would have been easier to concentrate on just a few characters and reduce the rest to cameos, but that was exactly what I didn't want to do because it gets done so much already.
It's a challenge I'm willing to take. Sometimes having many favorite characters and not one hate character (Pete and Demyx only annoy me, I'm not really hating them) can also be a hindrance when you could go for easier stuff but decide to try and treat them equally with story importance.
That sounds really reassuring. Great.
Gives a layer of challenge to write Riku, not really a reason to complain, lol.
Yep, and now add on top of that a guy that thinks mostly in German and translates stuff into English by the meaning of the words he knows without having much experience on how "youth-speech" or "casual slang" in English works.*ggg*.
The challenge is of course to make Sora act weird in a believeable way and still remind the reader (and Riku and Kairi, lol) that they're dealing with that Sora here even if the explanation for it won't be delivered just three chapters later.
Without telling too much on Mickey's personal reasons, I'll just say that he wasn't originally the only apprentice of Yen Sid. There was a trio too for a short while, and it ended somewhat more messy than the other ones of the series so far.
Missing three? The pic has four ??? spots...oh, I get it, you already count Terra in, right?
How about revealing your guesses (in spoiler tags), hehehe?
True dat, I also thought it gives some additional pep to the whole issue. The background colors of the portraits and the color of the borders also have a distinct meaning, did you know that (it's explained in the Opening post. ).
Four chapters for you, five for the rest of the audience, lol.
I really threw a curveball with that one, right? The chapter before Sora talks with Riku about his "plan" and we get Riku diving into Terra's memories the next turn, lol.
As for the quotes from the game BBS, well, I thought about how to give the SRK-Trio some first insight on the tragedies that occured during BBS and having Mickey or Yen Sid doing lengthy explanations will already take up some space so I thought about something different and also emphasize on the fact that, while Sora is the one to actually save them all, Riku is far more closely connected to Terra and should have a hand in his rescue even if it is only part of the preparation. It also serves two more points: One to give Riku something to disclose in the briefing they will hold with Mickey (Kairi will get on that bandwagon too) and second to have Terra have an presence inside Riku for purpose of the overaching story.
The bit of taking Riku away from the memories of Terra just as Ventus arrived was also intentional, lol, Riku shall not yet know how Ventus looks like.
That's the intention, short and sweet. Riku pulled Terra out of his moody attitude for now, that's some accomplishment right there, not to mention that Terra promised Riku to investigate the strange foreign darkness which is causing all sorts of trouble right now.
The intense end of chapter 27 is just the tip of the ice-berg, after Kairi's part we'll pick off right there where we left here, with Riku finally managing to get Sora to disclose what's really bothering him so much.
Sora doesn't know anything about Roxas yet except that he's his Nobody and now inside him. In KH2 he expressed his wish to actually meet Roxas and now he gets some flashes of pain like the small stab he felt in his heart or the "wave of pain" at the breakfast table. He doesn't know about Ven nor Xion, so it's reasonable that he thinks there's something seriously wrong with his Nobody.
Kairi's chapters will have a lot of exposition, that I can already disclose. ;D
It's in the works, patience my young padawan, lol.
First off thank you for the concern. I didn't perceive it as rude though, more like some childish and excited eagerness. XD
Ok, this is gonna be some long post, lol.
Just to shoot that out beforehand: I will be working in the improvements to the next chapter after I answered all these comments, so you can expect the new entry to be up eventually. ^___^
Yes, at least he will be until he can be reborn as his own person. After all, he does have a heart. Then hopefully all those idiots always painting him only as Sora or say he is Ventus will finally shut up.
Roxas is Roxas, and no one else! Sora himself even says so...
Exactly, they even left Vanitas' fate in the end of BBS pretty open to interpretation in terms of what exactly did happen to his consciousness and his dark heart in the end.
After all the shit that took place and what Vanitas put him through (and him also very unwilling to fuse their hearts in the first place) I would not be led to believe that Ventus would take Vanitas into him willingly at any point.
Don't worry about it, Sephly; I bet N.Rain is extremely busy in RL as I sent her an message to get knowing to each other and she hasn't responed back yet.
I do want the updated version of it, but I'll be patient, lol.
Alright then, I do hope though that I get the chapter soon. It would be neat if I could slowly get to maintain the proposed schedule which seems to get better now.
You are very welcome. The praise is deserved I believe. ^^
I can see why the emotional/dramatic parts can be the hardest. Battle scenes are only harder for me to write because I tend to be an emotional person, so it is not as hard for me to write emotionally as it is the describe a battle in which there is constant movement and action.I think the emotional/dramatic parts are hard when I do not connect with a certain character as much, so it is somewhat hard to get in their mindset. Every writer is different, which is a cool thing about writing. Your's seems very well rounded in all areas, but of course there is always room for improvement.
Braig does seem like a fun character to write. I have never gotten a chance to really write him into any of my writing. I stopped my fanfiction writing before I introduced him. Of course that was years ago before Braig was really in KH. Just Xigbar.
I understand that completely. Having all the characters and building upon them makes the story more dynamic and interesting. Not to mention it can be really fun to write all those characters.
The transitions are smooth enough for me. I am not having trouble following at all.
For me the balance between emotions is very important, and I love having a wide range of them. So I am very glad you consider those things.
Also, I would be happy to beta/proof-read any chapters. I know it is hard being busy in RL. I have never beta-read fanfiction, but I am certainly willing to read through your writing to check it.
Geee, thanks, I'm flattered. <3
Yeah, seems we are on opposite ends on how easy we can write certain scenes, although I won't say by any means that battle scenes are easy, lol.
It's funny as in order to "get" into characters I tend to re-watch parts of the series where they appear in and also take in the descriptions of their personality in order to come up with a decent response for a certain situation. When writing on HiU, I also tend to listen to appropriate soundtrack pieces every time to get into the mood for a scene, like i.e. in the Prologue I listened to "Destiny Islands" as well as Sora's and Kairi's themes when their focus parts came. Destati and Fragments of sorrow for chapter 1 when inside Sora's heart, Roxas' theme for the parts where he remembers his life or "The other Promise" to his fight with Ven.
While writing about Ventus' pain-trip during the chapters 9 to 11 I constantly listened to an extended version of Ven's theme and Aqua vs. Sephiroth was underlined by "Advent - One Winged Angel", the music from FF VII Advent Children Complete.
I see, lol. Braig is mostly just so fun to write because he's such a goddamn troll who manages to fed people up. That's mostly why I paired him with Isa for their mission as their personalities really clash and give food for some wonderful scenes. I especially like the scene when Leon throws the door into Braig's face in chapter 21 and Isa's sniding remarks getting back at his constant trolling.
Nonetheless they still form a formidable villain duo, don't they?
Yep yep, that's exactly one of the reasons that motivates me to go even further with this long snake of a story. It's also intriguing to let characters interact who did not yet actually meet in the games or only had some few minutes of screentime together.
That's good to hear I get this right. My biggest concern was that I would make things too confusing and hard to follow.
If I wouldn't consider it many of the characters would go pretty OOC very fast, which is always a sign of bad writing except if we are talking about a parody or comedy story.
Many thanks for the offer, although I think having too many betas/proofreaders would result in misunderstandings somewhat fast.
I have November Rain for the stuff here at KH Insider, starting with chapter 18 while I have another person for the FanFiction.net version.
Nice you would want to help though. ^__^
Was some tough stuff, huh?Huh, after overcoming some difficulties with both of my computers and a big pile of school assignments in these last two weeks I'm finally ready to continue with this project~ *u* Terribly sorry for the delay~ but I'm glad to see we have some impatient and enthusiastic readers here.
Yep, it's somewhat funny to have some impatient readers, lol. Only shows it's gaining some popularity though.
Then you'll be much satisfied later on as it gets much darker and sadder later on.
Of course it would have been easier to concentrate on just a few characters and reduce the rest to cameos, but that was exactly what I didn't want to do because it gets done so much already.
It's a challenge I'm willing to take. Sometimes having many favorite characters and not one hate character (Pete and Demyx only annoy me, I'm not really hating them) can also be a hindrance when you could go for easier stuff but decide to try and treat them equally with story importance.
That sounds really reassuring. Great.
Gives a layer of challenge to write Riku, not really a reason to complain, lol.
Yep, and now add on top of that a guy that thinks mostly in German and translates stuff into English by the meaning of the words he knows without having much experience on how "youth-speech" or "casual slang" in English works.*ggg*.
The challenge is of course to make Sora act weird in a believeable way and still remind the reader (and Riku and Kairi, lol) that they're dealing with that Sora here even if the explanation for it won't be delivered just three chapters later.
Without telling too much on Mickey's personal reasons, I'll just say that he wasn't originally the only apprentice of Yen Sid. There was a trio too for a short while, and it ended somewhat more messy than the other ones of the series so far.
Missing three? The pic has four ??? spots...oh, I get it, you already count Terra in, right?
How about revealing your guesses (in spoiler tags), hehehe?
True dat, I also thought it gives some additional pep to the whole issue. The background colors of the portraits and the color of the borders also have a distinct meaning, did you know that (it's explained in the Opening post.
).Four chapters for you, five for the rest of the audience, lol.
I really threw a curveball with that one, right? The chapter before Sora talks with Riku about his "plan" and we get Riku diving into Terra's memories the next turn, lol.
As for the quotes from the game BBS, well, I thought about how to give the SRK-Trio some first insight on the tragedies that occured during BBS and having Mickey or Yen Sid doing lengthy explanations will already take up some space so I thought about something different and also emphasize on the fact that, while Sora is the one to actually save them all, Riku is far more closely connected to Terra and should have a hand in his rescue even if it is only part of the preparation. It also serves two more points: One to give Riku something to disclose in the briefing they will hold with Mickey (Kairi will get on that bandwagon too) and second to have Terra have an presence inside Riku for purpose of the overaching story.
The bit of taking Riku away from the memories of Terra just as Ventus arrived was also intentional, lol, Riku shall not yet know how Ventus looks like.
That's the intention, short and sweet. Riku pulled Terra out of his moody attitude for now, that's some accomplishment right there, not to mention that Terra promised Riku to investigate the strange foreign darkness which is causing all sorts of trouble right now.
The intense end of chapter 27 is just the tip of the ice-berg, after Kairi's part we'll pick off right there where we left here, with Riku finally managing to get Sora to disclose what's really bothering him so much.
Sora doesn't know anything about Roxas yet except that he's his Nobody and now inside him. In KH2 he expressed his wish to actually meet Roxas and now he gets some flashes of pain like the small stab he felt in his heart or the "wave of pain" at the breakfast table. He doesn't know about Ven nor Xion, so it's reasonable that he thinks there's something seriously wrong with his Nobody.
Kairi's chapters will have a lot of exposition, that I can already disclose. ;D
Bring me Chapter 28 right now!! -pouts-
It's in the works, patience my young padawan, lol.
First off thank you for the concern. I didn't perceive it as rude though, more like some childish and excited eagerness. XD
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 28 posted)
Well, I tend to believe that Sora is indeed childless since he's only fifteen, lol.
That aside, it really comes over to me as more of a positive eagerness instead of rude demanding, that's what I meant to say. ^__^
Now on to the long awaited chapter 28 though:
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While Riku was out of words for now, not exactly knowing how to approach Sora's current mood, Kairi didn't notice anything that was going on due to the thick walls of the castle.
Her night was however also anything but calm.
Throwing herself around in fitful sleep as well she noticed a small, low voice calling for her.
Kairi, can you hear me? Please...could we talk for a while?
The Princess of Heart struggled mentally to get a clear focus. It was hard to focus the mind to the other plane of reality and let the consciousness not remain at sleep with the physical outer self.
Having finally managed to keep her consciousness awake and concentrate her mind on the voice, Kairi could finally settle down enough to give an answer.
It's Namine, right? I'm glad to finally hear from you...it's been over a month since we reunited fully and I sometimes even feared you might be gone.
A low sigh followed by a small chuckle was heard.
I would be " fully gone" if I didn't rejoin with you...but thanks to this, even if it is bitter on one hand to lose your physical existence and any form to influence things by yourself, my mind, consciousness and own memories survived inside you.
Kairi twitched a bit at this, her still strong sympathy for incomplete beings who were not allowed to exist resurfacing. The facts Axel had told her while they were travelling through the corridors of darkness touched her heart more than she had actually allowed herself to believe.
Do we really have to continue this by thought-conversation? I will come down to you and then we'll talk for real.
Without awaiting anymore answers, Kairi jumped into the dark abyss below her, letting her mind and consciousness dive into the heart for the first time.
She had in fact never done this before and was also not drawn into her heart involuntary at any point, but the pure light of her own heart and Namine's mind reached out for her, figuratively extending a hand to grab.
While floating down in a steadily faster manner Kairi could spot several interconnected high pillars with stained glass pictures on them, some depicting the same, some slightly varied motives. Either by having other symbols around the outer circle, depicting different persons in the seven circles arranged in the smaller inner circle, different colors and also different 'background'-worlds.
The only thing that was the same on every single platform, regardless of variant, was the big, sleeping figure of herself in her normal casual clothes on the right side of the stained glass pictures.
Floating down in an even faster pace she proceeded to search around for an appropriate platform to land on as she leaned forwards too much and made an involuntary somersault in the air.
Whoa...slowly...it's getting somewhat uneasy.
Kairi now fidgeted around a bit as she had lost balance, hearing a low chuckle from Namine.
Relax, don't get flustered. I'll guide you the rest of the way.
Doing as instructed, the Princess felt a faint, comfortable touch on her mind as Namine guided her slowly to one of the platforms where she softly landed after performing another, slow somersault.
"I'm finally here..." Kairi said aloud, surprised that there was no echo at all despite it being a vast, open black area.
Looking at the stained glass picture she could make out some familiar and some not-so familiar faces in the seven circles beside her own big figure.
Right beside her sleeping form on the two circles where the portraits of Sora and Riku, closest to her.
In the middle circle, not really surprising, was Namine's picture smiling back at her.
Below Namine, to the left of Riku's circle, there was the portrait of a blue-haired young woman Kairi could not clearly remember.
She must be important to me somehow...but I can't remember where I met her nor her name.
Above Namine, there was the picture of a young boy very similar to Sora, only with windswept, flaky blonde hair and a much more serious look on his face.
That must be...Roxas...Sora's Nobody...I spoke with him once when I fainted at the beach of the Islands while with Selphie. He helped me remembering Sora's name...
On the left beside Roxas, directly opposite Sora, was the picture of a young man with flaming red hair and emerald green eyes.
Axel!?!? What the...are we connected because we travelled a corridor of darkness together and he once kidnapped me..!?
The Princess of Heart was befuddled by the appearance of the other nobody on one of her awakening platforms.
The last circle, opposite Riku and beside the blue-haired woman depicted a picture of another being Kairi was unfamiliar with; a black-haired girl with similar features to her and Namine.
Who the heck is that? Unlike the blue-haired girl, who my heart tells me that I did met her once and have just forgotten, this girl brings no vibe or anything at all...looking at her picture only brings up an imaginary swirling dark cloud.
She threw back her head, eyes closed and thinking deeply.
The heart holds many secrets and mysteries the mind fails to understand...I wonder if it can be unraveled to a degree.
Opening her eyes again while still directing her gaze upwards Kairi had to blink as the bright shining light falling directly on the platform impeded her sight, indicating her heart of pure light all around.
As she let her view wander around she noticed that the "black" area around the platforms was not really darkness; it was just dimmed light and she could see other platforms from her position like through a veil.
So, have you adjusted to the atmosphere by now? Are you ready to meet?
Namine's politely spoken thoughts came in a calm, but sturdy manner.
"Yes, I have. Show me the way to finally meet you, Namine." Kairi answered aloud.
It's really simple. See that door to the right of you at the edge of the platform? Go through it and you'll find me...and...
An awkward pause was hanging in the air and Kairi knew that Namine was struggling to say something more. So she decided on patience and waited.
...as you might see in a few seconds...well, I hope you don't mind that I took the liberty to form a small part of your heart into a small residence for myself.
The girl with the dark red hair shook her head amused. "Why should I have anything against it? You originally came from here and have no other place to go now...of course it is ok."
Thank you.
Speaking those words Kairi stepped forwards firmly and opened the white ornamented door, a bright light shining from it as she stepped through without hesitation.
As the blinding light ceased to impair Kairi's vision she jumped in surprise, in astonishment over the sight that was now laid out to her.
She didn't know how it was even possible, but she was indeed standing in a small "residence", in fact a wide open, but comfortable room right inside her own heart.
Whhooa...can this be...I...I can't believe it...I may need to get my brain checked. Kairi laid one hand on the doorframe of the door, feeling the sensation of warm wood.
Namine sat on the opposite top of a plain white table with golden vines decorating the borders, smiling amused as she observed Kairi's stunned reaction, deciding to leave her more time to take in the layout of the room.
Kairi started to examine Namine's room with constantly growing interest.
The ceiling was pretty high up, at least 10 meters, two sparkling golden chandeliers hanging down on it with 13 lights on each, some pendants dangling down from them in different forms.
She could spot the heart-symbol, nobody-symbol, Sora's crown-symbol, a similar symbol to the nobody one only upside down, a Keyblade symbol, a stylized fleur-de-lys and Riku's heart-symbol with the fleur-de-lys at the bottom on them.
The ceiling itself was painted in plain white as well, but a big painting with an ornamented golden picture frame was located between the chandeliers, depicting a big, glowing blue heart-shaped moon.
That's...gotta be Kingdom Hearts...
Directing her gaze to the walls she noticed the wallpapers emanating a warm feeling, them being colored light orange with small yellow stars similar to paopu fruits located on them. They only went about down to hip-height however, as the rest of the lower wall was occupied by light beige wood paneling, whose center pieces where adorned by the same collection of seven symbols that where on the pendants hanging from the chandeliers, each panel depicting one symbol.
On the right side from her point of view the wall was punctuated with five broad, high windows, each one tightly covered by a pair of dark maroon curtains. Between them, and on the nearly entire left side of the room, numerous drawings, paintings and pictures where located.
It's almost like a gallery...
To her immediate right, beside the door was a small amount of collected plants and flowers standing on shelves, a small yellow watering can beside them. On the left side of the door there was a cupboard with a big mirror.
Turning her attention to the center now she noticed there was nothing but the white table with the golden linings on in the middle, thirteen maroon cushioned chairs arranged around it. Six on each side and one on the top end of the table across the door where Namine was sitting, crayons and a sketchbook lying before her on the table surface.
Three big candles in golden sockets were also spread across the surface.
Behind Namine though, the room went on a little bit further without any window. After a big curtain separating the whole section, which was open now, the wallpapers changed into dark maroon with a green and crimson rose-motive.
In that section on the left side there stood a big, wooden canopy bed, a moogle plushie sitting on it and a nightstand with a bedside lamp formed like a five-pointed yellow star right next to it. Flanking the lamp on both sides were two small picture frames with pictures of Roxas and Axel, respectively.
While the entire room directly behind Namine was occupied by a big, ornamented fireplace over which a huge painting of Kairi herself was located, the left side of that extra-section housed a big shelf filled with books, flanked by two more paintings depicting Sora and Riku.
"Wow...by all worlds...what an amazing place you have here. How is that even possible?" Kairi now finally directed her glance directly to Namine, who still displayed that amused smile.
"Welcome Kairi, I'm glad you don't mind me making it somewhat more comfortable. As for possible, believe it or not but I literally willed this place into existence. It's a display of imagination becoming a certain form of 'reality', a reality in this plane of existence."
The other girl's mouth slumped open in slight confusion.
"You imagined it and it then became real?"
"Not at once, it cost me several tries and I needed to draw it on my sketchbook to finally bring it into being."
"Simply amazing!"
"It does have its limits though, and I am also not sure if I can only do it because of my special form of existence."
Kairi nodded to that, slowly making her way from the door towards Namine, taking a look at some of the paintings on the left wall while walking, her eyes getting wider with every piece she saw.
One picture very accurately displayed the playground island with the bent palm tree, another one apparently herself as a little girl handing over a bouquet of flowers to the blue-haired woman that was depicted on her awakening pillar.
What is this!? Uh, I don't remember this, and also that place, is it, my original home world?
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Kairi's going to learn quite some stuff soon, although not everything may make sense at first, hehehe. ;D
Well, I tend to believe that Sora is indeed childless since he's only fifteen, lol.
That aside, it really comes over to me as more of a positive eagerness instead of rude demanding, that's what I meant to say. ^__^
Now on to the long awaited chapter 28 though:
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XXVIII. Dive into the heart
While Riku was out of words for now, not exactly knowing how to approach Sora's current mood, Kairi didn't notice anything that was going on due to the thick walls of the castle.
Her night was however also anything but calm.
Throwing herself around in fitful sleep as well she noticed a small, low voice calling for her.
Kairi, can you hear me? Please...could we talk for a while?
The Princess of Heart struggled mentally to get a clear focus. It was hard to focus the mind to the other plane of reality and let the consciousness not remain at sleep with the physical outer self.
Having finally managed to keep her consciousness awake and concentrate her mind on the voice, Kairi could finally settle down enough to give an answer.
It's Namine, right? I'm glad to finally hear from you...it's been over a month since we reunited fully and I sometimes even feared you might be gone.
A low sigh followed by a small chuckle was heard.
I would be " fully gone" if I didn't rejoin with you...but thanks to this, even if it is bitter on one hand to lose your physical existence and any form to influence things by yourself, my mind, consciousness and own memories survived inside you.
Kairi twitched a bit at this, her still strong sympathy for incomplete beings who were not allowed to exist resurfacing. The facts Axel had told her while they were travelling through the corridors of darkness touched her heart more than she had actually allowed herself to believe.
Do we really have to continue this by thought-conversation? I will come down to you and then we'll talk for real.
Without awaiting anymore answers, Kairi jumped into the dark abyss below her, letting her mind and consciousness dive into the heart for the first time.
She had in fact never done this before and was also not drawn into her heart involuntary at any point, but the pure light of her own heart and Namine's mind reached out for her, figuratively extending a hand to grab.
While floating down in a steadily faster manner Kairi could spot several interconnected high pillars with stained glass pictures on them, some depicting the same, some slightly varied motives. Either by having other symbols around the outer circle, depicting different persons in the seven circles arranged in the smaller inner circle, different colors and also different 'background'-worlds.
The only thing that was the same on every single platform, regardless of variant, was the big, sleeping figure of herself in her normal casual clothes on the right side of the stained glass pictures.
Floating down in an even faster pace she proceeded to search around for an appropriate platform to land on as she leaned forwards too much and made an involuntary somersault in the air.
Whoa...slowly...it's getting somewhat uneasy.
Kairi now fidgeted around a bit as she had lost balance, hearing a low chuckle from Namine.
Relax, don't get flustered. I'll guide you the rest of the way.
Doing as instructed, the Princess felt a faint, comfortable touch on her mind as Namine guided her slowly to one of the platforms where she softly landed after performing another, slow somersault.
"I'm finally here..." Kairi said aloud, surprised that there was no echo at all despite it being a vast, open black area.
Looking at the stained glass picture she could make out some familiar and some not-so familiar faces in the seven circles beside her own big figure.
Right beside her sleeping form on the two circles where the portraits of Sora and Riku, closest to her.
In the middle circle, not really surprising, was Namine's picture smiling back at her.
Below Namine, to the left of Riku's circle, there was the portrait of a blue-haired young woman Kairi could not clearly remember.
She must be important to me somehow...but I can't remember where I met her nor her name.
Above Namine, there was the picture of a young boy very similar to Sora, only with windswept, flaky blonde hair and a much more serious look on his face.
That must be...Roxas...Sora's Nobody...I spoke with him once when I fainted at the beach of the Islands while with Selphie. He helped me remembering Sora's name...
On the left beside Roxas, directly opposite Sora, was the picture of a young man with flaming red hair and emerald green eyes.
Axel!?!? What the...are we connected because we travelled a corridor of darkness together and he once kidnapped me..!?
The Princess of Heart was befuddled by the appearance of the other nobody on one of her awakening platforms.
The last circle, opposite Riku and beside the blue-haired woman depicted a picture of another being Kairi was unfamiliar with; a black-haired girl with similar features to her and Namine.
Who the heck is that? Unlike the blue-haired girl, who my heart tells me that I did met her once and have just forgotten, this girl brings no vibe or anything at all...looking at her picture only brings up an imaginary swirling dark cloud.
She threw back her head, eyes closed and thinking deeply.
The heart holds many secrets and mysteries the mind fails to understand...I wonder if it can be unraveled to a degree.
Opening her eyes again while still directing her gaze upwards Kairi had to blink as the bright shining light falling directly on the platform impeded her sight, indicating her heart of pure light all around.
As she let her view wander around she noticed that the "black" area around the platforms was not really darkness; it was just dimmed light and she could see other platforms from her position like through a veil.
So, have you adjusted to the atmosphere by now? Are you ready to meet?
Namine's politely spoken thoughts came in a calm, but sturdy manner.
"Yes, I have. Show me the way to finally meet you, Namine." Kairi answered aloud.
It's really simple. See that door to the right of you at the edge of the platform? Go through it and you'll find me...and...
An awkward pause was hanging in the air and Kairi knew that Namine was struggling to say something more. So she decided on patience and waited.
...as you might see in a few seconds...well, I hope you don't mind that I took the liberty to form a small part of your heart into a small residence for myself.
The girl with the dark red hair shook her head amused. "Why should I have anything against it? You originally came from here and have no other place to go now...of course it is ok."
Thank you.
Speaking those words Kairi stepped forwards firmly and opened the white ornamented door, a bright light shining from it as she stepped through without hesitation.
As the blinding light ceased to impair Kairi's vision she jumped in surprise, in astonishment over the sight that was now laid out to her.
She didn't know how it was even possible, but she was indeed standing in a small "residence", in fact a wide open, but comfortable room right inside her own heart.
Whhooa...can this be...I...I can't believe it...I may need to get my brain checked. Kairi laid one hand on the doorframe of the door, feeling the sensation of warm wood.
Namine sat on the opposite top of a plain white table with golden vines decorating the borders, smiling amused as she observed Kairi's stunned reaction, deciding to leave her more time to take in the layout of the room.
Kairi started to examine Namine's room with constantly growing interest.
The ceiling was pretty high up, at least 10 meters, two sparkling golden chandeliers hanging down on it with 13 lights on each, some pendants dangling down from them in different forms.
She could spot the heart-symbol, nobody-symbol, Sora's crown-symbol, a similar symbol to the nobody one only upside down, a Keyblade symbol, a stylized fleur-de-lys and Riku's heart-symbol with the fleur-de-lys at the bottom on them.
The ceiling itself was painted in plain white as well, but a big painting with an ornamented golden picture frame was located between the chandeliers, depicting a big, glowing blue heart-shaped moon.
That's...gotta be Kingdom Hearts...
Directing her gaze to the walls she noticed the wallpapers emanating a warm feeling, them being colored light orange with small yellow stars similar to paopu fruits located on them. They only went about down to hip-height however, as the rest of the lower wall was occupied by light beige wood paneling, whose center pieces where adorned by the same collection of seven symbols that where on the pendants hanging from the chandeliers, each panel depicting one symbol.
On the right side from her point of view the wall was punctuated with five broad, high windows, each one tightly covered by a pair of dark maroon curtains. Between them, and on the nearly entire left side of the room, numerous drawings, paintings and pictures where located.
It's almost like a gallery...
To her immediate right, beside the door was a small amount of collected plants and flowers standing on shelves, a small yellow watering can beside them. On the left side of the door there was a cupboard with a big mirror.
Turning her attention to the center now she noticed there was nothing but the white table with the golden linings on in the middle, thirteen maroon cushioned chairs arranged around it. Six on each side and one on the top end of the table across the door where Namine was sitting, crayons and a sketchbook lying before her on the table surface.
Three big candles in golden sockets were also spread across the surface.
Behind Namine though, the room went on a little bit further without any window. After a big curtain separating the whole section, which was open now, the wallpapers changed into dark maroon with a green and crimson rose-motive.
In that section on the left side there stood a big, wooden canopy bed, a moogle plushie sitting on it and a nightstand with a bedside lamp formed like a five-pointed yellow star right next to it. Flanking the lamp on both sides were two small picture frames with pictures of Roxas and Axel, respectively.
While the entire room directly behind Namine was occupied by a big, ornamented fireplace over which a huge painting of Kairi herself was located, the left side of that extra-section housed a big shelf filled with books, flanked by two more paintings depicting Sora and Riku.
"Wow...by all worlds...what an amazing place you have here. How is that even possible?" Kairi now finally directed her glance directly to Namine, who still displayed that amused smile.
"Welcome Kairi, I'm glad you don't mind me making it somewhat more comfortable. As for possible, believe it or not but I literally willed this place into existence. It's a display of imagination becoming a certain form of 'reality', a reality in this plane of existence."
The other girl's mouth slumped open in slight confusion.
"You imagined it and it then became real?"
"Not at once, it cost me several tries and I needed to draw it on my sketchbook to finally bring it into being."
"Simply amazing!"
"It does have its limits though, and I am also not sure if I can only do it because of my special form of existence."
Kairi nodded to that, slowly making her way from the door towards Namine, taking a look at some of the paintings on the left wall while walking, her eyes getting wider with every piece she saw.
One picture very accurately displayed the playground island with the bent palm tree, another one apparently herself as a little girl handing over a bouquet of flowers to the blue-haired woman that was depicted on her awakening pillar.
What is this!? Uh, I don't remember this, and also that place, is it, my original home world?
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Kairi's going to learn quite some stuff soon, although not everything may make sense at first, hehehe. ;D
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I must say your super long posts are impressive to look at, haha. I will look forward to this new entry whenever you get it up.
I am glad you are flattered.
It seems to be so, but in a way it makes reading more interesting.
I have never really thought to watch specific character scenes to get into a character. That is a very good idea! I can't believe that never really crossed my mind. XD I love listening to certain music when I am writing though. I had Destati and Fragments of Sorrow playing in my head the whole time I was reading the parts inside Sora's heart, so it is nice to know you were actually writing those parts while listening to them. I can see those specific songs playing in those specific parts too! Especially Aqua vs. Sephiroth and "One-Winged Angel."
Braig and Isa were so great together! It gives humor along with villainous intents hehe. I honestly could not stop laughing when Braig had that door slammed in his face. I could just picture it so well!
I will be looking forward to more of those character reactions.
I totally understand why you would not want more people beta reading. I just thought I would offer since I could. It appears as though you have great help.
EDIT: Yay new chapter lol
I must say your super long posts are impressive to look at, haha. I will look forward to this new entry whenever you get it up.
Geee, thanks, I'm flattered. <3
Yeah, seems we are on opposite ends on how easy we can write certain scenes, although I won't say by any means that battle scenes are easy, lol.
It's funny as in order to "get" into characters I tend to re-watch parts of the series where they appear in and also take in the descriptions of their personality in order to come up with a decent response for a certain situation. When writing on HiU, I also tend to listen to appropriate soundtrack pieces every time to get into the mood for a scene, like i.e. in the Prologue I listened to "Destiny Islands" as well as Sora's and Kairi's themes when their focus parts came. Destati and Fragments of sorrow for chapter 1 when inside Sora's heart, Roxas' theme for the parts where he remembers his life or "The other Promise" to his fight with Ven.
While writing about Ventus' pain-trip during the chapters 9 to 11 I constantly listened to an extended version of Ven's theme and Aqua vs. Sephiroth was underlined by "Advent - One Winged Angel", the music from FF VII Advent Children Complete.
I see, lol. Braig is mostly just so fun to write because he's such a goddamn troll who manages to fed people up. That's mostly why I paired him with Isa for their mission as their personalities really clash and give food for some wonderful scenes. I especially like the scene when Leon throws the door into Braig's face in chapter 21 and Isa's sniding remarks getting back at his constant trolling.
Nonetheless they still form a formidable villain duo, don't they?
Yep yep, that's exactly one of the reasons that motivates me to go even further with this long snake of a story. It's also intriguing to let characters interact who did not yet actually meet in the games or only had some few minutes of screentime together.
That's good to hear I get this right. My biggest concern was that I would make things too confusing and hard to follow.
If I wouldn't consider it many of the characters would go pretty OOC very fast, which is always a sign of bad writing except if we are talking about a parody or comedy story.
Many thanks for the offer, although I think having too many betas/proofreaders would result in misunderstandings somewhat fast.
I have November Rain for the stuff here at KH Insider, starting with chapter 18 while I have another person for the FanFiction.net version.
Nice you would want to help though. ^__^
I am glad you are flattered.
It seems to be so, but in a way it makes reading more interesting.
I have never really thought to watch specific character scenes to get into a character. That is a very good idea! I can't believe that never really crossed my mind. XD I love listening to certain music when I am writing though. I had Destati and Fragments of Sorrow playing in my head the whole time I was reading the parts inside Sora's heart, so it is nice to know you were actually writing those parts while listening to them. I can see those specific songs playing in those specific parts too! Especially Aqua vs. Sephiroth and "One-Winged Angel."
Braig and Isa were so great together! It gives humor along with villainous intents hehe. I honestly could not stop laughing when Braig had that door slammed in his face. I could just picture it so well!
I will be looking forward to more of those character reactions.
I totally understand why you would not want more people beta reading. I just thought I would offer since I could.
It appears as though you have great help. EDIT: Yay new chapter lol
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YAY!!!!! :3
Kairi just dived into her heart!? It's so good to see Namine once more!
That was Aqua.. hehe, can't wait for more! xD
By the way, I kind of fangirl squeeld for Kairi, which is totally weird since I'm an guy.. maybe I'm in love for kairi, haha.
YAY!!!!! :3
Kairi just dived into her heart!? It's so good to see Namine once more!
That was Aqua.. hehe, can't wait for more! xD
By the way, I kind of fangirl squeeld for Kairi, which is totally weird since I'm an guy.. maybe I'm in love for kairi, haha.
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We have a fanboy for kairi. I for one am a fanboy for Roxas/Ven (since I was 15 and I meant them individually not as a couple) but enough sidetracking XD
As for the Chapter, it was good. I was shocked at who appeared on kairi's panel (Axel). I am intrigued that Namine built a house while Roxas had to sleep on the cold floor }. Sorry the Loving Roxas part of me interferred XD . I also like the fact that Kairi has just as much char. Development as riku and sora. I miss Roxas and Ven but keep up the good work
P.S. I have always believed Roxas was his own person from when he was introduced (KH2) and I have stood firm to that. I actually predicted in KH2 he had a heart and 358/2 days made me think he is coming back. I also like the fact that even though Namine was more unique, Roxas was unique as well, because Sora had 2 hearts in him for Roxas to base off, hence the quick development of emotions. And Roxas was born from a TRUE sacrifice.
Your loyal fan to the ends of Kingdom Hearts,
Daxwren the Nobody of the Somebody Andrew
XD at my signature
We have a fanboy
for kairi. I for one am a fanboy for Roxas/Ven (since I was 15 and I meant them individually not as a couple) but enough sidetracking XDAs for the Chapter, it was good. I was shocked at who appeared on kairi's panel (Axel). I am intrigued that Namine built a house while Roxas had to sleep on the cold floor }
. Sorry the Loving Roxas part of me interferred XD . I also like the fact that Kairi has just as much char. Development as riku and sora. I miss Roxas and Ven but keep up the good work P.S. I have always believed Roxas was his own person from when he was introduced (KH2) and I have stood firm to that. I actually predicted in KH2 he had a heart and 358/2 days made me think he is coming back. I also like the fact that even though Namine was more unique, Roxas was unique as well, because Sora had 2 hearts in him for Roxas to base off, hence the quick development of emotions. And Roxas was born from a TRUE sacrifice.
Your loyal fan to the ends of Kingdom Hearts,
Daxwren the Nobody of the Somebody Andrew
XD at my signature
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The description in this chapter was amazing! I love the way you gave us a look into Kairi's heart. It sure does sound like a warm heart to be in, and it seems as though Namine has made herself comfortable. And Axel getting a place in Kairi's heart was a nice touch. All of the art! <3
I look forward to finding out what Namine is going to tell Kairi. Also, you win bonus points for letting Namine have a Moogle plushy.
The description in this chapter was amazing! I love the way you gave us a look into Kairi's heart. It sure does sound like a warm heart to be in, and it seems as though Namine has made herself comfortable. And Axel getting a place in Kairi's heart was a nice touch. All of the art! <3
I look forward to finding out what Namine is going to tell Kairi. Also, you win bonus points for letting Namine have a Moogle plushy.
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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 28 posted)
Kairi finally gets to meet Namine. Hurray! Wonder what they'll talk about. I'm was just as surprised as Kairi, to find out Namine was able to make such a room into existence within Kairi's heart. The details were outstanding in this chapter :] I really like learning about Kairi's awakening panel. How Axel, Xion and Aqua have appeared in them as well. So many connections to her own heart that she isn't even aware of. Especially Xion and Aqua. Looking forward to seeing what's next Seph!
Kairi finally gets to meet Namine. Hurray! Wonder what they'll talk about. I'm was just as surprised as Kairi, to find out Namine was able to make such a room into existence within Kairi's heart. The details were outstanding in this chapter :] I really like learning about Kairi's awakening panel. How Axel, Xion and Aqua have appeared in them as well. So many connections to her own heart that she isn't even aware of. Especially Xion and Aqua. Looking forward to seeing what's next Seph!
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 28 posted)
*late to review* Great chapter, Sephiroth! It's nice to see some development of a story on Kairi's side! I love your ideas on what her own pillar of awakening would be like (especially the fact that Axel is on it, in particular ), and I can't wait to see what Namine has to say. The description in this chapter was particularly vivid, which I liked quite a bit, and it's great to see that Namine still has some power within Kairi's heart to manipulate things. I can't wait to see what you've got planned next! Great job on this chapter!
*late to review* Great chapter, Sephiroth! It's nice to see some development of a story on Kairi's side! I love your ideas on what her own pillar of awakening would be like (especially the fact that Axel is on it, in particular
), and I can't wait to see what Namine has to say. The description in this chapter was particularly vivid, which I liked quite a bit, and it's great to see that Namine still has some power within Kairi's heart to manipulate things. I can't wait to see what you've got planned next! Great job on this chapter! 
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 28 posted)
So are we getting a look at Kairi's past?
So are we getting a look at Kairi's past?
Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 28 posted)
Really? I think that sometimes my posts tend to get too long, lol.
I do like explaining stances and issues thoroughly though. So it's a dilemma...<__<
I just thought that by not looking at how the character in question behaves in already established works the danger of making a character OOC is even greater. And you can't expect to remember every scene from a big JRPG-series out of memory, lol.
It's Yoko Shimomura's awesomeness that drives those music pieces. They really give the total KH-mood everytime you listen to some of them.
Aqua vs. Sephiroth is the biggest fight scene so far, and listening to the AC version of One-Winged-Angel really got me carried away on that one.
I wanted on one side portray that Sephiroth was really only playing around with Sora in KH2 and attempts to do the same with Aqua, but has to use some more power (though not his full power) when he realizes Aqua is some higher league.
That was then also the other side I wanted to show, that Aqua is powerful enough to at least hold her own against Sephiroth and fight on somewhat even terms.
For the Aqua & Sephiroth vs the Heartless Army I actually listened to "Fate of the Unknown", *ggg*.
That's why I choose them together, lol. Yep, that's what was intended, the reader would laugh, in stark contrast to Isa who doesn't laugh, only smirks, but nonetheless trolls Braig back somewhat with some snarky remarks.
It would probably get a bit convoluted if too many are at it. ^___^
And that's appreciated.
Indeed, lol, and despite some starting difficulties, she managed to do so on her own will, lol.
The people depicted on one of Kairi's awakening platforms (emphasis on one because as noted in the chapter, there are several ones and not all need to have the same pictures in the circles in the middle), Sora, Riku and Naminé should be obvious, Roxas less so but still more than Aqua, right?
Not to mention Axel is there as well as Xion. ;D
Don't you mean "fanboy squealed", haha, where is it said that boys aren't allowed to squeal in joy as well? *ggg*.
Maybe, lol, it isn't like Kairi is not a pretty girl or has some good qualities. Her main problem in the canon is just that she's underused.
Seems like it, lol, no problem. Haha, alright, I see. I won't call myself a fanboy but Roxas and Ven certainly rank higher in my favorite list than Kairi, which does not mean that I dislike Kairi though. (wasn't the indication for a couple an "x" anyways, like "Roxas x Ventus" would mean the pairing? lol)
(Relax though, even when you like that pairing, I won't judge and have also no problem with it generally spoken since they're not really blood-related, but pairing-discussions can go elsewhere, rofl, as the story is a strict no-pairing area) ^___^
That Axel appears there does have its reasons, although it is way, way too early to speak about that.
Well, as for Naminé being able to conjure a room, the layer of reality inside the hearts (the so-called "heart-layer" or spiritual world) where the inner selves reside do have some special properties.
It is not like Roxas would be unable to do something like that, it's just that he 1st doesn't know that this imaginative power exists, 2nd he is unaware that he could use it and 3rd he does not have Naminé's special drawing powers which indeed gave her some advantage in the whole issue.
Roxas plainly just had his mind on other things most of the time.
It's bad enough the canon series failed so far to at least give Kairi some small exposure in terms of character and true involvement. I don't intend to make the same mistake. Besides, Kairi will be needed for several things later on and right now she's about to learn some things, just like Riku, to explain in the briefing with King Mickey later.
Oh my, don't worry, the "twins" will have some more focus when the time is right, they're two of the thirteen central characters after all. We'll see some small tidbits of them again in chapter 32, but right now the development of other characters is important to give priority to.
Agreed, I also came to think of Roxas as an entire entity of his own after I finished KH2 for the second time (even before I knew about Days). I deduced that because after Roxas' birth Sora was restored and retained his own consciousness and memories, Roxas developed on his own into a person different from Sora. What Sora actually needed to become "whole" were the memories that rested within Roxas due to them being scattered by Naminé's manipulation and finding their way through the connection between Sora and Roxas into his Nobody. It wasn't Roxas' own essence or his newborn heart Sora needed, but he took these into his heart too in order to safeguard them.
Of course, it is even said more than once that Roxas is also a special case, although it is really up to debate how much he really got from Ven beside the appearance.
Naminé is however still one step higher due to her (at the beginning, before she grew her heart) having absolutely nothing, yet still existing. Roxas at least had Sora's old body and the soul.
I think the quick development from Zombie to really emotional kid with true feelings can by now safely confirmed to be the result of both Sora's and Ven's heart being in the mix.
I would even go so far to assume that Ven's heart (even if injured and sleeping) being present inside Roxas sped up the development-process of Roxas' newborn heart radically, which in turn also made him immune/more resistant to "Xehanortification".
I'm truly glad I can finally introduce Naminé to the story. <3
They'll talk about art, lol, I'm serious.
The next chapter is titled "Artistic Revelations" and Kairi will learn quite some stuff that comes in handy later.
Not to mention there are some more subtle hints hidden in some of the pictures and more foreshadowing.
About the room, yeah well, Naminé isn't much of a fighter so I for one wanted to have her make an impressive feat in another area and for two it would have come over a bit strange having her sitting on an awakening platform with her sketchbook and crayons, lol.
Naminé deserves some style, *ggg*, and it's also better to show off her drawings.
Yes, yes, the connections, the connections are going to play such an important role for numerous characters, that I can already say.
The title of the story has also something to do with it. ^___^
That said, besides her power over memories I wanted also to point out that Naminé instinctively has a bit more understanding about the powers of imagination and how the "heart layer", the plane of existence inside the hearts, works compared to the other characters.
I couldn't resist with that Moogle plushie. I think Naminé would look adorable holding a Moogle plushie.
I love how that picture of Axel is gaining so much attention despite it being (not yet) really important, lololol.
That I describe Kairi's pillar in this much detail serves also as one side of a sharp contrast we'll see after Kairi's episode.
When we're done with Kairi's episode, the tension between Riku and Sora we have left hanging will be resolved and we will make a short sidestep to look what's up with Roxas (Ven's still sleeping).
After this however, we'll shift the focus to Terra investigating the foreign darkness inside Riku's heart. And the circumstances won't allow for a thorough description of Riku's awakening pillar.
Hehehe, yeah, I thought quite some time what I should let Naminé do, also on the premise that she's still a highly special being, even if she does not have a physical form anymore and cannot act in the physical world.
Next weekend we shall moove forward hopefully. ;D
Yes, we'll get some glimpses, foreshadowing and more stuff important for the whole story will also be there, even if not immediately seeable.
I must say your super long posts are impressive to look at, haha. I will look forward to this new entry whenever you get it up.
I am glad you are flattered.
It seems to be so, but in a way it makes reading more interesting.
I have never really thought to watch specific character scenes to get into a character. That is a very good idea! I can't believe that never really crossed my mind. XD I love listening to certain music when I am writing though. I had Destati and Fragments of Sorrow playing in my head the whole time I was reading the parts inside Sora's heart, so it is nice to know you were actually writing those parts while listening to them. I can see those specific songs playing in those specific parts too! Especially Aqua vs. Sephiroth and "One-Winged Angel."
Braig and Isa were so great together! It gives humor along with villainous intents hehe. I honestly could not stop laughing when Braig had that door slammed in his face. I could just picture it so well!
I will be looking forward to more of those character reactions.
I totally understand why you would not want more people beta reading. I just thought I would offer since I could.
EDIT: Yay new chapter lol
Really? I think that sometimes my posts tend to get too long, lol.
I do like explaining stances and issues thoroughly though. So it's a dilemma...<__<
I just thought that by not looking at how the character in question behaves in already established works the danger of making a character OOC is even greater. And you can't expect to remember every scene from a big JRPG-series out of memory, lol.
It's Yoko Shimomura's awesomeness that drives those music pieces. They really give the total KH-mood everytime you listen to some of them.
Aqua vs. Sephiroth is the biggest fight scene so far, and listening to the AC version of One-Winged-Angel really got me carried away on that one.
I wanted on one side portray that Sephiroth was really only playing around with Sora in KH2 and attempts to do the same with Aqua, but has to use some more power (though not his full power) when he realizes Aqua is some higher league.
That was then also the other side I wanted to show, that Aqua is powerful enough to at least hold her own against Sephiroth and fight on somewhat even terms.
For the Aqua & Sephiroth vs the Heartless Army I actually listened to "Fate of the Unknown", *ggg*.
That's why I choose them together, lol. Yep, that's what was intended, the reader would laugh, in stark contrast to Isa who doesn't laugh, only smirks, but nonetheless trolls Braig back somewhat with some snarky remarks.
It would probably get a bit convoluted if too many are at it. ^___^
And that's appreciated.
Indeed, lol, and despite some starting difficulties, she managed to do so on her own will, lol.
The people depicted on one of Kairi's awakening platforms (emphasis on one because as noted in the chapter, there are several ones and not all need to have the same pictures in the circles in the middle), Sora, Riku and Naminé should be obvious, Roxas less so but still more than Aqua, right?
Not to mention Axel is there as well as Xion. ;D
Don't you mean "fanboy squealed", haha, where is it said that boys aren't allowed to squeal in joy as well? *ggg*.
Maybe, lol, it isn't like Kairi is not a pretty girl or has some good qualities. Her main problem in the canon is just that she's underused.
We have a fanboy
As for the Chapter, it was good. I was shocked at who appeared on kairi's panel (Axel). I am intrigued that Namine built a house while Roxas had to sleep on the cold floor }
P.S. I have always believed Roxas was his own person from when he was introduced (KH2) and I have stood firm to that. I actually predicted in KH2 he had a heart and 358/2 days made me think he is coming back. I also like the fact that even though Namine was more unique, Roxas was unique as well, because Sora had 2 hearts in him for Roxas to base off, hence the quick development of emotions. And Roxas was born from a TRUE sacrifice.
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Seems like it, lol, no problem. Haha, alright, I see. I won't call myself a fanboy but Roxas and Ven certainly rank higher in my favorite list than Kairi, which does not mean that I dislike Kairi though. (wasn't the indication for a couple an "x" anyways, like "Roxas x Ventus" would mean the pairing? lol)
(Relax though, even when you like that pairing, I won't judge and have also no problem with it generally spoken since they're not really blood-related, but pairing-discussions can go elsewhere, rofl, as the story is a strict no-pairing area) ^___^
That Axel appears there does have its reasons, although it is way, way too early to speak about that.
Well, as for Naminé being able to conjure a room, the layer of reality inside the hearts (the so-called "heart-layer" or spiritual world) where the inner selves reside do have some special properties.
It is not like Roxas would be unable to do something like that, it's just that he 1st doesn't know that this imaginative power exists, 2nd he is unaware that he could use it and 3rd he does not have Naminé's special drawing powers which indeed gave her some advantage in the whole issue.
Roxas plainly just had his mind on other things most of the time.
It's bad enough the canon series failed so far to at least give Kairi some small exposure in terms of character and true involvement. I don't intend to make the same mistake. Besides, Kairi will be needed for several things later on and right now she's about to learn some things, just like Riku, to explain in the briefing with King Mickey later.
Oh my, don't worry, the "twins" will have some more focus when the time is right, they're two of the thirteen central characters after all. We'll see some small tidbits of them again in chapter 32, but right now the development of other characters is important to give priority to.
Agreed, I also came to think of Roxas as an entire entity of his own after I finished KH2 for the second time (even before I knew about Days). I deduced that because after Roxas' birth Sora was restored and retained his own consciousness and memories, Roxas developed on his own into a person different from Sora. What Sora actually needed to become "whole" were the memories that rested within Roxas due to them being scattered by Naminé's manipulation and finding their way through the connection between Sora and Roxas into his Nobody. It wasn't Roxas' own essence or his newborn heart Sora needed, but he took these into his heart too in order to safeguard them.
Of course, it is even said more than once that Roxas is also a special case, although it is really up to debate how much he really got from Ven beside the appearance.
Naminé is however still one step higher due to her (at the beginning, before she grew her heart) having absolutely nothing, yet still existing. Roxas at least had Sora's old body and the soul.
I think the quick development from Zombie to really emotional kid with true feelings can by now safely confirmed to be the result of both Sora's and Ven's heart being in the mix.
I would even go so far to assume that Ven's heart (even if injured and sleeping) being present inside Roxas sped up the development-process of Roxas' newborn heart radically, which in turn also made him immune/more resistant to "Xehanortification".
Kairi finally gets to meet Namine. Hurray! Wonder what they'll talk about. I'm was just as surprised as Kairi, to find out Namine was able to make such a room into existence within Kairi's heart. The details were outstanding in this chapter :] I really like learning about Kairi's awakening panel. How Axel, Xion and Aqua have appeared in them as well. So many connections to her own heart that she isn't even aware of. Especially Xion and Aqua. Looking forward to seeing what's next Seph!
I'm truly glad I can finally introduce Naminé to the story. <3
They'll talk about art, lol, I'm serious.
The next chapter is titled "Artistic Revelations" and Kairi will learn quite some stuff that comes in handy later.
Not to mention there are some more subtle hints hidden in some of the pictures and more foreshadowing.
About the room, yeah well, Naminé isn't much of a fighter so I for one wanted to have her make an impressive feat in another area and for two it would have come over a bit strange having her sitting on an awakening platform with her sketchbook and crayons, lol.
Naminé deserves some style, *ggg*, and it's also better to show off her drawings.
Yes, yes, the connections, the connections are going to play such an important role for numerous characters, that I can already say.
The title of the story has also something to do with it. ^___^
Thanks, yep, Kairi's heart is as warm as Sora's and Naminé generally accepted her current status better than Roxas did (although they both are their own entities and would deserve to regain an own existence).The description in this chapter was amazing! I love the way you gave us a look into Kairi's heart. It sure does sound like a warm heart to be in, and it seems as though Namine has made herself comfortable. And Axel getting a place in Kairi's heart was a nice touch. All of the art! <3
I look forward to finding out what Namine is going to tell Kairi. Also, you win bonus points for letting Namine have a Moogle plushy.
That said, besides her power over memories I wanted also to point out that Naminé instinctively has a bit more understanding about the powers of imagination and how the "heart layer", the plane of existence inside the hearts, works compared to the other characters.
I couldn't resist with that Moogle plushie. I think Naminé would look adorable holding a Moogle plushie.
*late to review* Great chapter, Sephiroth! It's nice to see some development of a story on Kairi's side! I love your ideas on what her own pillar of awakening would be like (especially the fact that Axel is on it, in particular
I love how that picture of Axel is gaining so much attention despite it being (not yet) really important, lololol.
That I describe Kairi's pillar in this much detail serves also as one side of a sharp contrast we'll see after Kairi's episode.
When we're done with Kairi's episode, the tension between Riku and Sora we have left hanging will be resolved and we will make a short sidestep to look what's up with Roxas (Ven's still sleeping).
After this however, we'll shift the focus to Terra investigating the foreign darkness inside Riku's heart. And the circumstances won't allow for a thorough description of Riku's awakening pillar.
Hehehe, yeah, I thought quite some time what I should let Naminé do, also on the premise that she's still a highly special being, even if she does not have a physical form anymore and cannot act in the physical world.
Next weekend we shall moove forward hopefully. ;D
Yes, we'll get some glimpses, foreshadowing and more stuff important for the whole story will also be there, even if not immediately seeable.
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