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That was so GREAT!!! I absolutely LOVED it!!! I especially loved Riku's death scene. I know that sounds kind of sick, but it was pretty much the same death scene of Zack Fair of Crisis Core, and I really loved that ending. Also, I would like to know who this Ziz is. I think there were actually three mentioned in the story: the Ziz at the beginning, one of Riku's children, Ziz, and the Ziz that they prayed to at the end. Part of me has a feeling that his son Ziz and the Ziz they prayed to are the same, but I'm not sure. If I have any criticism, it would be the dialogue. You didn't put the names of the people talking on some of the statements, which made it a little confusing for me. Even though I think that, you still did a great job on this story; this one is my favorite of all of them so far. Can't wait until you post a new story.
(grabs Kelsie's red knives and waves them around) just, uh, think about it. (Kelsie comes on the scene, knees Mina, removes knives, and starts mumblng about obsession)