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I did this for my typography class. :/ wanna see what others thought

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I've yet to take typography in college ]: But this looks pretty creative, with the woman's figure and all.

The one thing that's really killing it for me is the 'Lorem Ipsum' text on the right with the scribble-y brush behind it. It looks overall random and just slapped on in comparison to the rest of the work. ]:

Try to make that part fit more into the figure, make it a part of the work instead of something complete separate on the other end of the page. Maybe make it flow along with the swirl-y bit on top or something. :D
 

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I think thatyou should use just text to form the shapes rather than have text with a solid colour background. If you can do that, it'd look that much more impressive.
 
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