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Smile
On my face,
a small curve,
so bright,
so radiant.

What a farce.

Another layer,
a mask of
ideals
forced
through sheer will.

Perhaps if you,
or perhaps you can't,
try to enter me,

You can see:
The darkness in my heart;
The resignation in my sighs;
The cloudiness of my mind;
The empty space my soul should be.

But you cannot.

And therefore,
all I can do
is smile,
just smile.



This is probably one of the first poems I wrote; I wasn't a fan of writing poems up until I realise their awesomeness this year.

And no, I don't believe in rhyming of poems. Poem rhyming is for idiots. If you want a rhyme poem I'll throw out my poem called Stigma which is literally having almost all words beginning with S and hardly makes sense unless you're a literary master.

And apparently, neither do I believe in poem structure. Screw poem structure. Every poem has its own unique structure as far as all the good poems I've seen (by professional poets) have wrote anyway.

I began writing poems to push out the emotions that plagued me when I got rejected for my school's Student Council... It's been working out pretty fine. This was one of the poems I wrote when I was really super depressed. And I still feel sad reading it, because I still am like that.

A very straightforward poem compared to some of my others. This one I was more interested in stuffing in emotions than to make it more philosophical.
 

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I'm really liking this writing style. the cut-offs of each line adds a great effect, and it's quite a cute poem, as well. So, for it being one of your first poems in a while or so, I quite like it, a lot :3.

Keep at it ^^
 

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I'm obviously not a professional poet if I only began writing...

And I'm not that great. I just don't mindlessly take prose and line break it into 50 different lines like what I see some people in this forum doing. Cause that just isn't poetry.
 

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Tis is true. Even though this appears to be "professional" poetry, it is just words on paper. however, it still has a very great meaning, and that is what makes it good :3.
 

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I love how you go from the smile, to what the smile is hiding. It gave a whole new meaning to the poem.
Great job and I hope to see more of your poems :3
 
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