Fanfiction ► The battle never ends

[Shadowysights]

This is my first fan fiction...........please don't flame me.PLEASE!!!

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Chapter 1:The past doe's not matter now
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"This is it" Sora sighed
"Guess so"Riku repied
*Thinking*We are all thats left..........why did it come to this?

He started this and I'll end this....My team and I can hande'll this.........
tomorrow we fight an army..........that has over a million

soilders...........use seven can handle this crap................Reno, Axel, Demex, Kairi, Riku....Me.....You.There now my best friends we will live on that island when its done.
Ocassionaly visting Other worlds.........till then we can fight......I can baraly remember the past now how it started if I remember I promise I'll tell you.
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I promise the chapters will get longer.

 

[Shadowysights]

Next chapter.................maybe someone will start to like the story......and maybe comment....I hope.
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~will be redone shortly~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Can someone comment even if you don't like it?

 

[Shadowysights]

I hope someone reads this............and likes it!Please comment.
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Chapter:3--Radiant Garden is the place I wanna be.
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"What did they do to you?"Sora asked
"Not telling"Roxas repiled

Later in Radiant Garden evil is about to rearize.Yes so soon.Yea....you know
Walking down the lonely streets of radaint garden only to be joined by someone whose joy could light up the street......If only it was someone he wanted to see.

"Cloud....were have ya been buddy"Reno asked with no kind of seriousness.
Putting his arm on Cloulds slouder.

"Remove the arm"Cloud asked
"You can't scare me!"

Cloud pulls out a gun.
"Remove the arm"

"Okay man, dang"Reno repield
"I have a friend to meet....."

"Tifa? "
They walked down the street talking friendly banter.....but it wasn't so friendly....

"So weres your boyfriend?"Cloud asked
"I don't go out with Rude!! But I got a better question: Wheres your girlfriend?"Reno impeild
"Where's your momma at!!"
"I don't know!!!"
They stared each other down.....still going down the street!Still going down the street..They finnaly stoped somewhere...to be grited by another..

"If you gonna make out at least not in pupic"
"Cid!"Cloud eclaimed
"Yea....its me now move that gay stuff off the road"

"You heard him, Reno, you gotta go."
"He said gay, you gotta go."Reno repeild

"Why don't you both go!?"Cid jumped in
"No becuse I ain't gay!!!"Cloud and Reno both yelled

Suddenly Sephrioh appered

"Ahh..Cloud I'm not looking for you!!"

He then disappered....after much confusion someone spoke

"He hasn't done any thing, just seems to be looking for some one"Cid whisperd

"Everyones gonna wanna be here,this is where all the action is"

Elsewhere.......
Sora leaned against the wall in his house, straring at kairi at and Riku looking for something to do.Riku finnaly spoke

"Lets go to hollow bastion..."
"You mean Raidiant garden?"

"Shut-up Sora"
Kairi just striared and wacthed them fight.

 

[Mr.]

O__O

Please, I don't even want to read because the chapters are squished.
And NO FLOW. D: AT ALL.

*flees*

 

[Shadowysights]

O__O

Please, I don't even want to read because the chapters are squished.
And NO FLOW. D: AT ALL.

*flees*

No flow?What do you mean? And I'll try to make them less squised,Later......okay happy now?

 

[Sterling_Silver]

No flow, no detail, no grammar. Just an all-around not-good thing. I STRONGLY suggest you read any stickies made by Thelonepickle or GuardianOfHearts, mainly "The Articles of Literacy". Then come back, edit all of the above posts and try to give it a little more... detail, I guess.

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EDIT: "Tips on skill building: Giving your story emotional weight" is a GREAT place to start also, it's on the second page.

 

[Shadowysights]

What do you mean flow? Whats That mean?Can someone tell me?
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Chapter:4 The money needers
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Cloud leaned against the wall in Tifa's bar.Wondering who besides himself is more inportant to Sepiroth and why.The others had conversations they knew would not last....to get off subject of who is Sepiroth looking for?Reno took his beer and left....thankfully becuse here grown-up talk is going on.....yes........ grown-up talk..Now all the adults were talking

"Who could devert Sepiroth's mind from desturction?"Tifa wondered
"Maybe someone owns him money"Yuffie reipeld
"Stop jokeing"Cid said flatly

Before anyone could speak anymore,crys of help screamed down the road.
Socked, everyone raced outside to see two boys, running from Sepihroth

"Heeeeeelp"one sceamed as Tifa came to the rescuse

"Let them go Sepihroth,I'm your challege now"Tifa exclaimed flatly

Tifa rushed Sephiroth, while the boys qivered in a corner.Two girls walked by and told them

"Your so weak"

Sephiroth just looked at them and in a minute, they were also in corner.
Then focused back on Tifa.She tough a punch but he doged easliy.

"Oh was that susposed to hit me?"Sephiroth taunted

Tifa could not land one hit.Suddenly Cloud jumped in with his buster sword.
With the light he could finnaly see...he defeated Sephiroth.Then they wacthed as the childern marveled over the perfromance.

"WOW,AWESOME!!"One boy yelled
"Thanks,mister!!"The other said

Every one wacthed as they when't next door It may of been there home.

"If they live there trouble could ster."Cid finnaly said
"Why is Sephiroth after some kids?"

Everyone's qeustions double at the turn of events.To see a wonderious face jog the steets.

"Hey guys!"Sora exclaimed"What are you doing?
Later....after they explained the events

"So what is Sephiroth doing?"Sora asked

"Thats what we wanna know"Cloud repield while leaning on the cold brick wall.

"We'll Sora you wanted action..."Riku added

"Oh yea this is Riku the friend I searched for"Sora annouced

To worryed about Sephiroth the crowd let out a flat "Hey" and kept wondering
No-one knew what sephiroth was thinking.

To be continued.......
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Please coment

 

[Shadowysights]

No flow, no detail, no grammar. Just an all-around not-good thing. I STRONGLY suggest you read any stickies made by Thelonepickle or GuardianOfHearts, mainly "The Articles of Literacy". Then come back, edit all of the above posts and try to give it a little more... detail, I guess.

:\

EDIT: "Tips on skill building: Giving your story emotional weight" is a GREAT place to start also, it's on the second page.

What is flow?I can fix it if you tell me what "flow" is.Also thanks for the tip