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The Love Of Chess



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Aliahya

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I move to you closer,
Just to touch the other side
Make myself known
But our hands are tied

Yet the lies that dart around me
Murder my only wall.
The only knight I knew
Once stood tall

Taken by the rook who
Skipped my defence
In a quick ounce of luck
Is now behind the main fence

I am checked
I am locked
But my pawn at the edge
The clock ticks ... tick tock, tick, tock

The Queen on your side
Stands gleaming and bright
She looks at me leering
How majestic, how right?

Her horror glares
As her power rules
As she takes my knight, my bishop and rook
And i am ever left a fool

She dangles me there
I’m scared she’ll let go
My pieces near taken
Do you notice me? ...no

Three pieces to go
But hope still remains when you glance at me there
Do you still love me?
Could you even care?

She stands there still
With your best friend there
His regal like qualities,
And long flowing hair

He diagonalled behind your back for sure
Touching your queen and doing it all
But there all away and your all alone
I see you, as you begin to fall

Where are they now?
As my offence is strong
The few pieces I have
Are edging you on

But I’ll take my chances as I walk to your side
I love you it’s true but I can’t take you now
You’ve ignored me, belittled me
And now I’m yours?

I’m always just the rebound girl
I guess in this game of love, chess and war
I’ve checkmated you still
And to your knees you still fall

But the queen is still there and I’m all alone
Just a dainty love interest
I guess I’ve known all along
But the last move I say, the easiest, the best

I surrender my will
This game I detest
Never together will I ever be
I am the pawn!
And never the queen.
 

King Sora X

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Oh wow owo

That poem was not only very sad, and heart-breaking, but it was also very great. I haven't seen much poetry from you, and when I do I always expect great things. There were some spelling errors here and there, but overall it's a great poem ^^. Though I get the strange feeling this is something that you've experienced. Well nevertheless, you did a magnificent job at it. So great job ^___^
 

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Oh wow, thank you for your responce,ken, to be honest i didnt expect any replies in this thread, im glad you like it and felt something when you read it. Ive always liked poetry and only recently have i started writing my own. I'll try and work on the spell though ^_^

<3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <----For You
 
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