Okay this is a different version of a short story i did for English class last year i am running off alot of what i remember so here its is. Critiquing is appreciated.
I watched as the dark storm clouds loomed over the valley. The village seemed to welcome the darkness that was so close to surrounding them in shadow. I was the only one to show signs of uneasiness for the foreshadowing of dark things to come. People sit safely in their homes waiting for the darkness to pass, but how safe are they. The dark flows into me bringing back painful memories,of broken friendship, lost love, and tragic death. My name is Wolf and this is my tale.
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Chapter 1: The beginning
The sky burned a bright orange in the early morning sun as birds flew through the air landing in trees and singing their songs. Children ran and played in the streets while others went to the market to work. Parents were off at war or at home cleaning and preparing for the town festival. Three children around the age of fourteen walked through the park on their way to the temple to train. They each wore the traditional village attire for training a chain mail vest and protective leather.
"So Rei are we going to spar again so you can lose?" One boy asked the tallest of the three.
"Right so you can show off for Kari eh Wolf." Rei replied as Wolf's face turned red.
"You guys do realize I am right here right?" Kari said looking up at both Wolf and Rei.
In terms of height Kari stood shorter than both Rei and Wolf she wore her brown hair in a small pony tail during training.
"Yes but we can still talk about you" Rei said laughing as his black hair which hangs just below the back of his neck ruffled in the wind.
Rei laughed until they reached the temple where the grand master Kor waited. He watched Rei laughing, turned to Wolf who just started putting his helmet on over his short blonde hair. Kor watched Kari position her self in front of him and bow. Rei stopped laughing when he saw the look of seriousness on Kor's face.
"Sorry for my outburst master" Rei apologized bowing to Kor
"Sorry...Sorry does not excuse your tardiness and lack of uniform." Kor said sternly "Where is your helmet a warrior stands no chance in war without his helmet."
"Sorry master it seems I have left it at home." Rei said looking up at his master.
Kor looked down at Rei and grunted. Everyone stood and listened to master Kor for further instruction.
"My faithful students" Kor said as they walked inside "Today is the final lesson of your training after this there is nothing more I can teach you. Are you ready?"
"Yes master." The three replied as Kor walked into the center of the sparring ring.
"For your final test you must battle me." Kor told them as he pulled a sword down from the wall.
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Thanks for reading more chapters to come i hope.
I watched as the dark storm clouds loomed over the valley. The village seemed to welcome the darkness that was so close to surrounding them in shadow. I was the only one to show signs of uneasiness for the foreshadowing of dark things to come. People sit safely in their homes waiting for the darkness to pass, but how safe are they. The dark flows into me bringing back painful memories,of broken friendship, lost love, and tragic death. My name is Wolf and this is my tale.
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Chapter 1: The beginning
The sky burned a bright orange in the early morning sun as birds flew through the air landing in trees and singing their songs. Children ran and played in the streets while others went to the market to work. Parents were off at war or at home cleaning and preparing for the town festival. Three children around the age of fourteen walked through the park on their way to the temple to train. They each wore the traditional village attire for training a chain mail vest and protective leather.
"So Rei are we going to spar again so you can lose?" One boy asked the tallest of the three.
"Right so you can show off for Kari eh Wolf." Rei replied as Wolf's face turned red.
"You guys do realize I am right here right?" Kari said looking up at both Wolf and Rei.
In terms of height Kari stood shorter than both Rei and Wolf she wore her brown hair in a small pony tail during training.
"Yes but we can still talk about you" Rei said laughing as his black hair which hangs just below the back of his neck ruffled in the wind.
Rei laughed until they reached the temple where the grand master Kor waited. He watched Rei laughing, turned to Wolf who just started putting his helmet on over his short blonde hair. Kor watched Kari position her self in front of him and bow. Rei stopped laughing when he saw the look of seriousness on Kor's face.
"Sorry for my outburst master" Rei apologized bowing to Kor
"Sorry...Sorry does not excuse your tardiness and lack of uniform." Kor said sternly "Where is your helmet a warrior stands no chance in war without his helmet."
"Sorry master it seems I have left it at home." Rei said looking up at his master.
Kor looked down at Rei and grunted. Everyone stood and listened to master Kor for further instruction.
"My faithful students" Kor said as they walked inside "Today is the final lesson of your training after this there is nothing more I can teach you. Are you ready?"
"Yes master." The three replied as Kor walked into the center of the sparring ring.
"For your final test you must battle me." Kor told them as he pulled a sword down from the wall.
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Thanks for reading more chapters to come i hope.
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