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Fanfiction ► [You.Tore.Me.To.Pieces]-Collective Original Ministories



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XSpasticPrincess

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I Seem to only be able to write short stories and I thought I'd group together in a collection. Keep in mind they are Ministories and some don't even have diologue, others are only a paragraph long...but here are the First two.

NOTE: Most of them will be romances.


/.You.Make.Love.A.Big.Deal.\

I'm holding my heart in two separate pieces as I look at him. The anger is obvious in his eyes and I know that when all I wanted was to hold him, I really only succeeded in pushing him further. I can't even feel the tears slip silently down my eyeliner stained cheeks, but I know they're there, why wouldn't they be? His chest is rising and falling unevenly and his breath is ragged. He opens his mouth, "You know how I felt about her! And you bothered saying that to me?" He snaps, his voice is so thick with hatred that I'm choking. The pieces of my heart I was holding, explode into meaningless shards of emotional distress. I let out a surprised gasp and stumble back. "You hurt me deep, Princess and I bet you have no idea why I'm still standing here do you?" He asks me, advancing slowly. I close my eyes and shake my head, sending thick locks of inky black hair into my face, as if hiding myself from his hate. "Because...I can't leave you." He says finally, his voice is soft and I'm forced to open my eyes. Before another word can escape my lips, his collide with them. The kiss lasts an ecstatic eternity and I know at that moment that I have fallen in love.

*Another Movie Script Ending To a Harlequin Romance*

I watched from the sidelines as he fawned over her. And why wouldn't he, she was older, prettier and everything I wasn't..including stupid. She could barely spell or speak without an aide to correct her and she giggled 90% of the time...and he was hooked.

She wore less clothing than a dancer at a skin bar and was more suggestive than a pornographic tape. He gawked, she giggled and flaunted, and I remained tied to the sidelines, wishing I was her. He wrapped an arm around her waist and pulled her lips to his, and then she left. I knew she was cheating on him and I was desperate to prove myself right, so naturally I followed the tramp. Finding myself at a sleazy motel I slipped a toy into my pocket and knocked on the door.

When no one answered I walked in. Only to see her deep in a liplock with a man that definately wasn't the love of my life. My heart was racing and I didn't even hear myself screaming at her. It wasn't long after that the toy was out of my pocket and kicking in my palm. I had only been out of my shock for a few seconds, and processing the blood on my arms when I saw the video camera. Turns out I was right, she was as suggestive as a pornographic tape, in fact she made them for money. It also turns out that the tramp wasn't so much of a tramp as a hooker of sorts. That's when the voice behind me screamed.

He was asking me what I had done and what I was thinking. The screaming hurt my head and the kicking my palm started up again. Opening my eyes I saw him lying half alive on the stained motel carpet. My head spun, leaning down I kissed his lips, and-teary eyed- told him "I love you." before pressing the toy to my own forehead and feeling the kick in my palm for the last time.
 

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Very, very deep and interesting. There's more but I can't think tonight
 

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/.You.Make.Love.A.Big.Deal.\ : I think this was my prefered one out of the two. It's so sweet and intense, you've really captured the LOVE, but at the same time it's very accessible and easy to read.


Another Movie Script Ending To a Harlequin Romance*: This one sounded very natural, in your writing style. Kind of sordid as well, very visual, which really brings your story to life.


I enjoyed them both. Short and sweet. I also liked the titles of both, if that counts for anything.
 

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The first one was sweet....

Personaly though.... I liked this one better because.... I felt her pain.... and it was obvious you felt it to.... I thinbk it should that when jealuosy gets the better.... you can hurt the one you love....
 

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*sniff* That Was so Sweet, You Have The Heart of a Poet....but 1 problem...The font kinda hurts meh eyes and i have to highlight it..try to make it a brigher darker color please.
 

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I loved it Spas. It was deep, sad, and all that good stuff. Keep em coming. i can't wait to read more.
 

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-bumps- <.< I luff it. But...make it longer next time...<.<
 

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I prefer the second one over the first, and not only because of the length. You kept this sense of gloom in every paragraph. Good shtuff.
 

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Time for the Next Story it's very very short. One page...written in my notebook..thats veryvery short

.:.My.Prom.Date.:.

My heartbeat echoes in my ears, I can't believe he's saying these things. My mouth is dry and in my head a prayer repeats itself over and over. Please Be Kidding, Please Be Kidding....

He keeps talking, and it becomes more and more obvious that my prayers are going to remain unanswered. He says hes going to have fun with a mute loser like me. He uses a stronger word than loser but I don't let my brain dwell on it. He says he hates it when they scream, and takes a step toward me. The next five minutes blur together and I wake up puking on the floor of the alley. My body aches and I'm terrified to move a muscle. I had never imagined this when the most popular boy in school-whom I had come to fall in love with in so many ways-asked me to prom. Crying hysterically, feeling used and worthless I drag a piece of the broken alley window over to me and hold it against my throat. Whispering goodbye to no one I pull it across my flesh violently.

.:.The End.:.
 

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i like these stories. very dramatic. though i liked them all, my favorite one was /.You.Make.Love.A.Big.Deal.\.
 

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Like.....awesomeness spasy, you keep your readers interested in what you write by making it very, very dramatic..I like that =D
 
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