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Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
that sounds really cool. Keep it up!
that sounds really cool. Keep it up!
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Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
Its going into the story a little too fast, the characters are a little too unrealistic, not the kind of thing I like to read…but good work anyway.
Its going into the story a little too fast, the characters are a little too unrealistic, not the kind of thing I like to read…but good work anyway.
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Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
well with superpowers and all,it's not really supposed to be that realistic LOL,but thanx for the comments.
well with superpowers and all,it's not really supposed to be that realistic LOL,but thanx for the comments.
Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
The story is pretty good. I like the direction you take. Very original. This is my first time seeing a fic like this. Keep it up. My fav. character is definately chris. Cant wait to see what his power is. Also if you don't mind, could you read my fic Elite Union?? If you do read can you reply??
The story is pretty good. I like the direction you take. Very original. This is my first time seeing a fic like this. Keep it up. My fav. character is definately chris. Cant wait to see what his power is. Also if you don't mind, could you read my fic Elite Union?? If you do read can you reply??
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Okeey folks, here be the next chapter,enjoy ^^
They walked along a country road about a mile away from where they jumped out of the van, the same road, and not a single car seen on it,since the black van.
"I wonder,where we are"Laura said.
"We all do,Laura,we all do"Chris replied,with a hint of seriousness in his voice,for once.
They continued to walk in silence for another fifteen or so minutes,until Erika spoke up,"there in the distance,do you see it?"Erika asked as she pointed off into the horizon
"Is that a town?"Chris asked,"I think so"Erika replied,"I hope so"Laura cut in.
"What's wrong Rob,you haven't spoken in over half an hour"Erika said to Rob.
"What's wrong?what's wrong?WHAT'S WRONG?,we were kidnapped by two mysterious guys,we were stuck in a van for hours,with no idea where we were,you blew the doors off,that idiot over there wont accept the fact that you don't like him,we're in the middle of nowhere,and your all acting pally,as if you've known each other for years,THAT'S what's wrong."Rob shouted.
"Wow,man,chill,seriously,oh,and by the way,she so does like me"Chris informed Rob.
"SEE WHAT I MEAN?!?!?"Rob screamed.
"So Chris is a ,that's the least of our troubles Erika replied,"come on,we'll just make it to this next town,and we'll take it from there."
"Yeah,that's easy for you to say,you know your "ability",and why those two wanted you",Rob replied angrily.
"Hey,leave her alone"Chris demanded.
"Yeah,or what?"Rob replied.
"Or I'll kick your ass"Chris threatened him.
The two boys stared at each other,they glared at each other,not blinking,trying to show each other,who's boss.
"C'mon guys,stop this,let's just stick to the road"Laura interupted.
The two boys turned away from each other, and continued walking,not even daring,to look at one another.
They alked in silence 'til they reached the town,there was no sign to indicate,what the name of the town was,so they decided,to walk around and find out.
They each split up and said they would meet back at the town hall(just at the entrance to the town) in two hours................................
Yes this chapter was shorter than most,as it's just a springboard chapter as the next four chapters,will be each of the characters two hours in the town,and what they encounter.
So plz comment on that chapter,good or bad,thnx and g'night.
Okeey folks, here be the next chapter,enjoy ^^
Chapter6:What's wrong????
They walked along a country road about a mile away from where they jumped out of the van, the same road, and not a single car seen on it,since the black van.
"I wonder,where we are"Laura said.
"We all do,Laura,we all do"Chris replied,with a hint of seriousness in his voice,for once.
They continued to walk in silence for another fifteen or so minutes,until Erika spoke up,"there in the distance,do you see it?"Erika asked as she pointed off into the horizon
"Is that a town?"Chris asked,"I think so"Erika replied,"I hope so"Laura cut in.
"What's wrong Rob,you haven't spoken in over half an hour"Erika said to Rob.
"What's wrong?what's wrong?WHAT'S WRONG?,we were kidnapped by two mysterious guys,we were stuck in a van for hours,with no idea where we were,you blew the doors off,that idiot over there wont accept the fact that you don't like him,we're in the middle of nowhere,and your all acting pally,as if you've known each other for years,THAT'S what's wrong."Rob shouted.
"Wow,man,chill,seriously,oh,and by the way,she so does like me"Chris informed Rob.
"SEE WHAT I MEAN?!?!?"Rob screamed.
"So Chris is a ,that's the least of our troubles Erika replied,"come on,we'll just make it to this next town,and we'll take it from there."
"Yeah,that's easy for you to say,you know your "ability",and why those two wanted you",Rob replied angrily.
"Hey,leave her alone"Chris demanded.
"Yeah,or what?"Rob replied.
"Or I'll kick your ass"Chris threatened him.
The two boys stared at each other,they glared at each other,not blinking,trying to show each other,who's boss.
"C'mon guys,stop this,let's just stick to the road"Laura interupted.
The two boys turned away from each other, and continued walking,not even daring,to look at one another.
They alked in silence 'til they reached the town,there was no sign to indicate,what the name of the town was,so they decided,to walk around and find out.
They each split up and said they would meet back at the town hall(just at the entrance to the town) in two hours................................
Yes this chapter was shorter than most,as it's just a springboard chapter as the next four chapters,will be each of the characters two hours in the town,and what they encounter.
So plz comment on that chapter,good or bad,thnx and g'night.
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Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
Still great. but I agree with 8Myworldsmyown8, it's going a little fast.
Still great. but I agree with 8Myworldsmyown8, it's going a little fast.
Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
This chap. is such a cliffhanger!!! I'm so anxious to see whats next!!!
This chap. is such a cliffhanger!!! I'm so anxious to see whats next!!!
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As Laura walked through the small town,she noticed alot of tractors driving by,"hmmm,must be a farming town,we must be a good bit away from Marshall City"she said to herself.
She continued walking,'til she got to a service station,she went in to ask for directions,and to ask where she was.
Laura walked up to the counter,where a short chubby man in dungarees, and chequred shirt,with light brown hair and a pudgy face,was sitting,working the till.
"Well howdy,little lady,what can I do ya for?"he asked her.
"Em.............well I was wondering if you could tell me the name of this place?"Laura asked.
"Sure can ma'am,this here gas station is called "Gas and Beans Service Station",that's our main source of income,gas and beans"the man replied.
"No,no whats the anem of the town"Laura said as she shook her head.
"Oh,this little ol' town is called Hickory Falls,ona counta we is situated right near a waterfall"he answered.
"Thank you"Laura said as she walked out of "Gas and Beans Service Station".
The man ran to the door,"hey ain't ya gonna buy no gas or beans?"the man enquired.
"Um..............no sorry,I don't have any money on me"Laura replied.
"Oh,ok"the disappointed man said as he shuffled back to the counter.
"Maybe I should have invested in something better than gas"the man said as he sat down.
Laura had already found out the name of the town,but forgot,to ask for directions.
"Aww crap"she muttered to herself,"aww,I'll get the directions later,right now I gotta get something to eat."
Laura looked for a cafe,but then remembered she had no money,she'd have to steal something.
She walked into a confectionary store, looked around,as if she was going to find something,she needed a distraction.
After about five minutes of pretending to look around,she was getting bored,and was aout to quit,until,outside, a burst of flames,flew up to the sky,from about two blocks over.
The shopkeeper ran out to see what it was,Laura swiped some candy,and shoved it in her pockets.
As the shopkeeper walked back to the counter,Laura said goodbye,as inoccently a possible,but the shopkeeper noticed the missing candy,"HEY" he shouted.
Laura ran down the street,but she wasn't looking where she was going,and bumped inot someone.
It was Chris, he was running too,they didn't spend long talking"see ya in an hour"Chris said as he sped off,"Em yeah"Laura replied as she had to run too.
After a long chase from the shopkeeper,Laura found a bush,and jumped into into it.
"Ok,I'll hide here 'til it's time to meet up with the others"she whispered to herself.
And that's just what she did......................
Plz read and comment,oh,and if it's a little confusing,all will be answered in the next couple of chapters ^^.
Thanx g'night
Chapter7:Hickory Falls:Laura
As Laura walked through the small town,she noticed alot of tractors driving by,"hmmm,must be a farming town,we must be a good bit away from Marshall City"she said to herself.
She continued walking,'til she got to a service station,she went in to ask for directions,and to ask where she was.
Laura walked up to the counter,where a short chubby man in dungarees, and chequred shirt,with light brown hair and a pudgy face,was sitting,working the till.
"Well howdy,little lady,what can I do ya for?"he asked her.
"Em.............well I was wondering if you could tell me the name of this place?"Laura asked.
"Sure can ma'am,this here gas station is called "Gas and Beans Service Station",that's our main source of income,gas and beans"the man replied.
"No,no whats the anem of the town"Laura said as she shook her head.
"Oh,this little ol' town is called Hickory Falls,ona counta we is situated right near a waterfall"he answered.
"Thank you"Laura said as she walked out of "Gas and Beans Service Station".
The man ran to the door,"hey ain't ya gonna buy no gas or beans?"the man enquired.
"Um..............no sorry,I don't have any money on me"Laura replied.
"Oh,ok"the disappointed man said as he shuffled back to the counter.
"Maybe I should have invested in something better than gas"the man said as he sat down.
Laura had already found out the name of the town,but forgot,to ask for directions.
"Aww crap"she muttered to herself,"aww,I'll get the directions later,right now I gotta get something to eat."
Laura looked for a cafe,but then remembered she had no money,she'd have to steal something.
She walked into a confectionary store, looked around,as if she was going to find something,she needed a distraction.
After about five minutes of pretending to look around,she was getting bored,and was aout to quit,until,outside, a burst of flames,flew up to the sky,from about two blocks over.
The shopkeeper ran out to see what it was,Laura swiped some candy,and shoved it in her pockets.
As the shopkeeper walked back to the counter,Laura said goodbye,as inoccently a possible,but the shopkeeper noticed the missing candy,"HEY" he shouted.
Laura ran down the street,but she wasn't looking where she was going,and bumped inot someone.
It was Chris, he was running too,they didn't spend long talking"see ya in an hour"Chris said as he sped off,"Em yeah"Laura replied as she had to run too.
After a long chase from the shopkeeper,Laura found a bush,and jumped into into it.
"Ok,I'll hide here 'til it's time to meet up with the others"she whispered to herself.
And that's just what she did......................
Plz read and comment,oh,and if it's a little confusing,all will be answered in the next couple of chapters ^^.
Thanx g'night
Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
Lol That chap. was funny. The farmer dude made me laugh. Write the next part so I can see where the heck those flames came from
Lol That chap. was funny. The farmer dude made me laugh. Write the next part so I can see where the heck those flames came from
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Re: A New Breed of Hero:The Beginning
I bet Chris made that fireball. But I could be wrong
I bet Chris made that fireball. But I could be wrong
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Well my fans(all 3 or 4 of you LOL),here is chapter 8,Erika's story,enjoy.
Erika strolled through the city,thinking about the things that have happenned,in just a couple of hours,nothing like this had happenned to her before,infact,she had never heard of anything like this before.
As she walked down a small narrow street her stomach began to rumble,"better get something to eat"she said to herself.
She walked around for about five minutes,'till she came to a cafe,she looked up the sign and read the name of the cafe aloud,"coffee and beans?".
She shrugged her shoulders and walked in.
"Greetin's stranger,welcome to coffee and beans,Hickory Falls' biggest money makin' establishoment,apart from the gas station"Said the chirpy young blonde behind the counter.
"Don't you mean establishment?"Erika asked.
"That's what I gone done and said, establishoment"the woman replied.
"Ok?so em.............Hickory Falls is the name of the town,yes?Eria enquired.
"Your darn tootin' "the woman answered.
"I see,em.......could you tell me the way to Marshall City?"Erika requested.
"Marshall City?That's an evil place,I ain't telling noone how to get there,I ain't givin' up my soul to the devil"the woman snapped.
"I'M FROM MARSHALL CITY,AND IT'S A LOVELY PLACE,EXCUSE ME!!!!"Erika shouted at the woman.
The whole cafe fell silent,everyone stared at Erika,then in a flash,they had picked up pitchforks,and they all screamed,"a satanist".
"Where'd they get those pitchforks"Erika asked herself,before she noticed they were charging at her with them.
She screamed as she ran out of the cafe with the mob behind her.
After about ten minutes of chasing,up and down the town,Erika jumped a wall,and getting away from the mob.
She waited five minutes,for a chance to get away,she climbed the wall,only to bump into Rob.
"Oh,hi Rob"she said to him.
"Erika,hi,any luck?Rob asked.
"Em,I found out the name of the town,but I couldn't get directions sadly.
"Same luck here,but hey,we can always find out together"Rob sugested.
"Sure"Erika said as she flicked back her hair.
"Hmm,yeah"Rob said,as they began to walk.
Erika was staring at Rob with a weird look on her face,Rob noticed this,"what's wrong with you?"he asked.
"Oh nothing"Erika replied,after which she sighed.
Around two blocks down, Rob caught something out the corner of his eye,the,all of a sudden, a flame erupted from the area,Rob was looking at.
"Uh,sorry Erika,I gotta go"Rob said apologetically.
"What?"Erika said as Rob ran off,"it must have had something to do with that flame"Erika said to herself"I'll go check it out".
Erika walked to the spot where the flame was,only to see a scorched mark on the ground,Erika was shocked,she was so confused.
Then, in the distance, she saw a group of people walking in her direction, saying things like "he gone done got way",and "he was mighty fast".
As some people in the group lifted theeir heads,they noticed Erika,and shouted "IT'S THE ANTI-CHRIST!!!!"
They ran after Erika,pitchforks in hand,and Erika fled from them, after turning a corner sharply,she saw a bush on the side of a street.
"Aha"she said to herself as she ran,and dived into the bush.
"I'll hide here 'til the heat dies down"she taught to herself.
And that's just what she did...................................
More plot-holes,all will be revealed in the next chapters.^^
Please comment,or gimme any tips you want,thank you,g'night.
Well my fans(all 3 or 4 of you LOL),here is chapter 8,Erika's story,enjoy.
Chapter8:Hickory Falls:Erika
Erika strolled through the city,thinking about the things that have happenned,in just a couple of hours,nothing like this had happenned to her before,infact,she had never heard of anything like this before.
As she walked down a small narrow street her stomach began to rumble,"better get something to eat"she said to herself.
She walked around for about five minutes,'till she came to a cafe,she looked up the sign and read the name of the cafe aloud,"coffee and beans?".
She shrugged her shoulders and walked in.
"Greetin's stranger,welcome to coffee and beans,Hickory Falls' biggest money makin' establishoment,apart from the gas station"Said the chirpy young blonde behind the counter.
"Don't you mean establishment?"Erika asked.
"That's what I gone done and said, establishoment"the woman replied.
"Ok?so em.............Hickory Falls is the name of the town,yes?Eria enquired.
"Your darn tootin' "the woman answered.
"I see,em.......could you tell me the way to Marshall City?"Erika requested.
"Marshall City?That's an evil place,I ain't telling noone how to get there,I ain't givin' up my soul to the devil"the woman snapped.
"I'M FROM MARSHALL CITY,AND IT'S A LOVELY PLACE,EXCUSE ME!!!!"Erika shouted at the woman.
The whole cafe fell silent,everyone stared at Erika,then in a flash,they had picked up pitchforks,and they all screamed,"a satanist".
"Where'd they get those pitchforks"Erika asked herself,before she noticed they were charging at her with them.
She screamed as she ran out of the cafe with the mob behind her.
After about ten minutes of chasing,up and down the town,Erika jumped a wall,and getting away from the mob.
She waited five minutes,for a chance to get away,she climbed the wall,only to bump into Rob.
"Oh,hi Rob"she said to him.
"Erika,hi,any luck?Rob asked.
"Em,I found out the name of the town,but I couldn't get directions sadly.
"Same luck here,but hey,we can always find out together"Rob sugested.
"Sure"Erika said as she flicked back her hair.
"Hmm,yeah"Rob said,as they began to walk.
Erika was staring at Rob with a weird look on her face,Rob noticed this,"what's wrong with you?"he asked.
"Oh nothing"Erika replied,after which she sighed.
Around two blocks down, Rob caught something out the corner of his eye,the,all of a sudden, a flame erupted from the area,Rob was looking at.
"Uh,sorry Erika,I gotta go"Rob said apologetically.
"What?"Erika said as Rob ran off,"it must have had something to do with that flame"Erika said to herself"I'll go check it out".
Erika walked to the spot where the flame was,only to see a scorched mark on the ground,Erika was shocked,she was so confused.
Then, in the distance, she saw a group of people walking in her direction, saying things like "he gone done got way",and "he was mighty fast".
As some people in the group lifted theeir heads,they noticed Erika,and shouted "IT'S THE ANTI-CHRIST!!!!"
They ran after Erika,pitchforks in hand,and Erika fled from them, after turning a corner sharply,she saw a bush on the side of a street.
"Aha"she said to herself as she ran,and dived into the bush.
"I'll hide here 'til the heat dies down"she taught to herself.
And that's just what she did...................................
More plot-holes,all will be revealed in the next chapters.^^
Please comment,or gimme any tips you want,thank you,g'night.
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Hmm......interesting.
So apparently Marshall City ain't too popular.
Hmm......interesting.
So apparently Marshall City ain't too popular.
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Ok,I was inspired today,here's Chapter 9,enjoy. ^^
Chris,walked through the streets of the town,looking in shop windows,house windows,infact,any window he could see.
"Hmm,this town is pretty borin'"Chris sighed to himself.
Chris continued to walk down the street until,he noticed a quite attractive girl walking in his direction,Chris leant against a wall,put on a more macho voice and uttered"hey baby, nice legs,when do they open?" as she walked by.
The woman turned 'round and slapped Chris in the face.
After recovering from the pain Chris decided he was hungry,and saw a service station,"hmmm,maybe I can swipe some food,in there"he thought to himself, as he ran to a gas station,with the name of "gas and beans".
"Howdy partner"the man behind the counter said as Chris entered,Chris nodded to the man.
Chris noticed there was no security camera,in the store,so,Chris swiped a tin of beans,why beans?because that was the only thing in the store.
Chris walked out, as if nothing had happenned,Chris said to the man as he left"nothing I fancied,sorry".
The man began to speak to himself"that's the second person today,I knew gas was definately a bad idea."
After about ten minutes of hitting the tin,off a stone,but the tin remained closed,"DAMN IT!!!"Chris screamed,"I'll need to go get food someplace else".
Chris walked around the town,'til he reached a cafe called "coffee and beans", upon entering he uttered to himself "what the hell is this town's deal with beans?"
After entering,he noticed a girl walking in the opposite, was it Erika?He doubted it and just walked into the cafe.
Chris bought himself a bowl of beans as he muttered to himself"why did I have to spend my money,damn that rock."
After eating his meal of beans,Chris left the cafe to see something two blocks down,it was Erika,but who was she with?
"That's Rob"Chris said to himself scournfully.
Chris noticed the way Erika looked at him,this angered Chris,this angered him intensivally.
He felt a pressure rising through him,his anger became uncontrollabe,the surge of power,reached his head,and a burst of flames,expelled from Chris' body.
Chris hadn't a clue what had happened,he felt weird and he was very scared,he looked up again and noticed Rob was gone,he looked around him,the townspeople were shocked.
Chris blinked,and as he opened his eyes,every single townsperson seemed to have a pitchfork.
"THIS TIME IT'S THE ANTI-CHRIST"the mob shouted,as they ran at Chris.
"Eep"Chris said weakly,he burst in to a sprint,to get away from the crowd.
He sharply turned a corner,he continued to run,not looking where he was going,he bumped into someone,it was Laura, she was running too,they didn't spend long talking"see ya in an hour"Chris said as he sped off,"Em yeah"Laura replied as she had to run too.
Chris ran and ran around the town atleast three times,he saw a bush,he clambered into it,and whispered to himself,"I'll hide here for a while".
And that's just what he did..............................
w00t two chapters in one day,hope ya liked 'em thank you g'night again.
Ok,I was inspired today,here's Chapter 9,enjoy. ^^
Chapter9:Hickory Falls:Chris
Chris,walked through the streets of the town,looking in shop windows,house windows,infact,any window he could see.
"Hmm,this town is pretty borin'"Chris sighed to himself.
Chris continued to walk down the street until,he noticed a quite attractive girl walking in his direction,Chris leant against a wall,put on a more macho voice and uttered"hey baby, nice legs,when do they open?" as she walked by.
The woman turned 'round and slapped Chris in the face.
After recovering from the pain Chris decided he was hungry,and saw a service station,"hmmm,maybe I can swipe some food,in there"he thought to himself, as he ran to a gas station,with the name of "gas and beans".
"Howdy partner"the man behind the counter said as Chris entered,Chris nodded to the man.
Chris noticed there was no security camera,in the store,so,Chris swiped a tin of beans,why beans?because that was the only thing in the store.
Chris walked out, as if nothing had happenned,Chris said to the man as he left"nothing I fancied,sorry".
The man began to speak to himself"that's the second person today,I knew gas was definately a bad idea."
After about ten minutes of hitting the tin,off a stone,but the tin remained closed,"DAMN IT!!!"Chris screamed,"I'll need to go get food someplace else".
Chris walked around the town,'til he reached a cafe called "coffee and beans", upon entering he uttered to himself "what the hell is this town's deal with beans?"
After entering,he noticed a girl walking in the opposite, was it Erika?He doubted it and just walked into the cafe.
Chris bought himself a bowl of beans as he muttered to himself"why did I have to spend my money,damn that rock."
After eating his meal of beans,Chris left the cafe to see something two blocks down,it was Erika,but who was she with?
"That's Rob"Chris said to himself scournfully.
Chris noticed the way Erika looked at him,this angered Chris,this angered him intensivally.
He felt a pressure rising through him,his anger became uncontrollabe,the surge of power,reached his head,and a burst of flames,expelled from Chris' body.
Chris hadn't a clue what had happened,he felt weird and he was very scared,he looked up again and noticed Rob was gone,he looked around him,the townspeople were shocked.
Chris blinked,and as he opened his eyes,every single townsperson seemed to have a pitchfork.
"THIS TIME IT'S THE ANTI-CHRIST"the mob shouted,as they ran at Chris.
"Eep"Chris said weakly,he burst in to a sprint,to get away from the crowd.
He sharply turned a corner,he continued to run,not looking where he was going,he bumped into someone,it was Laura, she was running too,they didn't spend long talking"see ya in an hour"Chris said as he sped off,"Em yeah"Laura replied as she had to run too.
Chris ran and ran around the town atleast three times,he saw a bush,he clambered into it,and whispered to himself,"I'll hide here for a while".
And that's just what he did..............................
w00t two chapters in one day,hope ya liked 'em thank you g'night again.
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Look forward to more ^_^
Look forward to more ^_^
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Yet another chapter my chums
Rob was still pretty pissed about the predicament he was in,who could blame him?
God knows,how many miles away from home,no idea where he is,and stuck with two strangers,and his sister,worst of all.
Rob walked through the town,lost in thought,at first he was angry about the kidnapping,bu remembering,Chris,just seemed to send him over board,he went to sit on a bench,to try and calm down,and chill.
"I don't know how I'm going to survive,even if we find out where we are and when we can get home,I don't think I could spend another minute with that idiot"Rob thought to himself.
"Well, I suppose I can't sit here all day,I will need to get directions if I ever want to get away from Chris."he continued.
Rob got up from the bench and continued his walk down the path.
Rob walked around to the town for a little bit,'til he came to a shoddily painted shack,with a sign above it, reading "Infomation Senter".
Rob walked in,ignoring the spelling mistakes,as Rob entered the shack,the stench of manure,filled his nostrils,it was unbearable,Rob pulled his jumper over his face and continued to the "infomation" desk.
"Howdy,stranger,ain't seen you 'round hickory falls,ya local?"the woman behind the counter asked.
"Em,no I'm from Marshall City,and I'm wondering,could you tell me how I could get there?"Rob pleaded.
"Ooh,sorry,can't help ya tharr,Marshall City is the devil's casino,you best leave before folk,learn whereabouts you is from"The woman suggested.
"Casino?em,well ok,thanks anyway"Rob walked out of the "Infomation senter",as Rob got outside, he took a deep breath of fresh air,"aaah" he sighed.
As he turned a corner,a girl seemed to come out of nowhere,as if she jumped a wall,or something,it was Erika.
"Oh,hi Rob"she said to him.
"Erika,hi,any luck?Rob asked.
"Em,I found out the name of the town,but I couldn't get directions sadly.
"Same luck here,but hey,we can always find out together"Rob sugested.
"Sure"Erika said as she flicked back her hair.
"Hmm,yeah"Rob said,as they began to walk.
Erika was staring at Rob with a weird look on her face,Rob noticed this,"what's wrong with you?"he asked.
"Oh nothing"Erika replied,after which she sighed.
Around two blocks down, Rob caught something out the corner of his eye,it was Chris,he couldn't see much of him,but judging by his stance,he was pissed,then,a burst of flames,roared through Chris' body,"shit,this has something to do with me hanging round with Erika,I know,I better go before he comes over here"Rob thought to himself.
"Uh,sorry Erika,I gotta go"Rob said apologetically.
"What?"Erika said as Rob ran off.
"Well,I guess Chris can control fire or something,I better stay the hell away from them,then"Rob thought to himself.
Rob spent the next hour walking around town,but looking out for Chris at the same time,after avoiding Chris,for the hour,Rob decided he best go meet up with the others,and face the music.
Rob arrived at the meeting point to find,none of them had arrived,he looked across the rroad,and saw a bush,he saw rumaging in it,Rob walked over to it,looked in.
"Chris,Laura,Erika,why are you all in that bush?"Rob asked.
"No,it's only me in this bush," they all replied simultaeneasly,"oh,"they all said together,again.
"What the hell where you guys up to?,nevermind,we better go,anyone get directions?"Rob asked.
They all stared back at him blankly.
"Great" Rob replied......................
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Chapter10:Hickory Falls:Rob
Rob was still pretty pissed about the predicament he was in,who could blame him?
God knows,how many miles away from home,no idea where he is,and stuck with two strangers,and his sister,worst of all.
Rob walked through the town,lost in thought,at first he was angry about the kidnapping,bu remembering,Chris,just seemed to send him over board,he went to sit on a bench,to try and calm down,and chill.
"I don't know how I'm going to survive,even if we find out where we are and when we can get home,I don't think I could spend another minute with that idiot"Rob thought to himself.
"Well, I suppose I can't sit here all day,I will need to get directions if I ever want to get away from Chris."he continued.
Rob got up from the bench and continued his walk down the path.
Rob walked around to the town for a little bit,'til he came to a shoddily painted shack,with a sign above it, reading "Infomation Senter".
Rob walked in,ignoring the spelling mistakes,as Rob entered the shack,the stench of manure,filled his nostrils,it was unbearable,Rob pulled his jumper over his face and continued to the "infomation" desk.
"Howdy,stranger,ain't seen you 'round hickory falls,ya local?"the woman behind the counter asked.
"Em,no I'm from Marshall City,and I'm wondering,could you tell me how I could get there?"Rob pleaded.
"Ooh,sorry,can't help ya tharr,Marshall City is the devil's casino,you best leave before folk,learn whereabouts you is from"The woman suggested.
"Casino?em,well ok,thanks anyway"Rob walked out of the "Infomation senter",as Rob got outside, he took a deep breath of fresh air,"aaah" he sighed.
As he turned a corner,a girl seemed to come out of nowhere,as if she jumped a wall,or something,it was Erika.
"Oh,hi Rob"she said to him.
"Erika,hi,any luck?Rob asked.
"Em,I found out the name of the town,but I couldn't get directions sadly.
"Same luck here,but hey,we can always find out together"Rob sugested.
"Sure"Erika said as she flicked back her hair.
"Hmm,yeah"Rob said,as they began to walk.
Erika was staring at Rob with a weird look on her face,Rob noticed this,"what's wrong with you?"he asked.
"Oh nothing"Erika replied,after which she sighed.
Around two blocks down, Rob caught something out the corner of his eye,it was Chris,he couldn't see much of him,but judging by his stance,he was pissed,then,a burst of flames,roared through Chris' body,"shit,this has something to do with me hanging round with Erika,I know,I better go before he comes over here"Rob thought to himself.
"Uh,sorry Erika,I gotta go"Rob said apologetically.
"What?"Erika said as Rob ran off.
"Well,I guess Chris can control fire or something,I better stay the hell away from them,then"Rob thought to himself.
Rob spent the next hour walking around town,but looking out for Chris at the same time,after avoiding Chris,for the hour,Rob decided he best go meet up with the others,and face the music.
Rob arrived at the meeting point to find,none of them had arrived,he looked across the rroad,and saw a bush,he saw rumaging in it,Rob walked over to it,looked in.
"Chris,Laura,Erika,why are you all in that bush?"Rob asked.
"No,it's only me in this bush," they all replied simultaeneasly,"oh,"they all said together,again.
"What the hell where you guys up to?,nevermind,we better go,anyone get directions?"Rob asked.
They all stared back at him blankly.
"Great" Rob replied......................
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"Ok,ok,let me get this straight,you all spent only two hours in this town,and you've made reputations for yourselves???"Rob asked the three in the bush.
"Yes"they all replied.
"HOW??"Rob screamed.
"Well I stole some candy"Laura replied.
"They thought I worshipped Satan"said Erika.
"They thought I WAS Satan,"Chris said sternfully.
"You did not just call me ,did you?"Rob shouted.
"What if I did fly-boy?"Chris replied.
"Why in the hell did you????"Rob ordered.
"Oh,I saw you earlier"Chris told him.
"So?"Rob asked.
"So,I saw you flirting with Erika"Chris pointed out.
"Flirting,I wasn't flirting,was I Erika?"Rob asked.
"Em...................um.................uh.............no,no,of course not,I mean why would you?"Erika said in a depressing voice.
"SEE!!!!"Rob shouted,still oblivious to Erika's expressions.
"Fine,well, we should be going anyway, we've gotta get out of here,before anyone see's us"Chris suggested.
They all agreed and quickly ran out of Hickory Falls,for good,they hoped.
The gang,had made it to the freeway on which they saw a sign,Laura read it out aloud"Marshall City, 60 kilometers".
"6o KILOMETERS!?!?!"Erika shouted,after which she looked down to the bottom of the sign,on which it said"Yes,it is 60km to Marshall City".
The group stood shocked,reading the sign,"weird"Erika uttered.
As the group hitch-hiked,along the freeway,they began to talk to each other about themselves,seen as they could be spending a very long journey together,they did so,and bonded,suprisingly even Chris and ROb shared some common ground.
After about another hour of hitch-hiking a red and white cadillac pulled up,by the gang.
"Where ya headin'?"asked the driver,clad in a leather jacket,and jeans,with a brown afro(which looked like a wig),and what seemed to be a fake moustache.
"Marshall City"Laura replied.
"Oh,coolio,were heading there too"the second man,clad the same,but with blonde hair(that also looked like a wig) replied.
"Hope on"the driver exclaimed.
All the kids hopped in the back,and the car sped off.
"So,kiddies,what's your names?"the driver asked.
"I'm Robert,that's Laura,Chris,and Erika"Rob said pointing out each person,as he said their name.
"Coolio,well I'm Mac,and this is my good friend Joe"the driver(Mac) replied.
"Please to meet you"Laura said as she smiled at them.
"Oh,the pleasure is all ours"Joe assured them.
The car suddenly took a U-turn at began to drive in the other direction.
"Yo,Starsky,this ain't the way to Marshall City"Chris pointed out.
"I know" Joe replied,as he pulled of his blonde wig.
"Were not going to Marshall City,just yet"Mac replied,as he took off his fake moustache and wig.
"Your,your,those guys from the van"Rob stated.
"No shit,sherlock"Mac replied.
"Now just sit back and enjoy the ride"Joe said to them,as a glass window came down between the back of the car and the front of the car.
Both Laura and Chris tried to open the back doors,but they were locked.
"Erika,make the doors fall off,"Rob ordered.
"I,I don't know how I did it"Erika informed them.
"Well, what'll we do??"Rob asked.
"How the hell should I know,"Erika shouted.
Mac and Joe heard muffled screams from the back.
"Ah,kids,don't ya just love them"Mac said as the car drove off,with the gang trapped in the back.................
Well there she is chapter11,hope ya liked it,please post,also thanx for the post firekitty ^^
Chapter11:Marshall City,Here We Come
"Ok,ok,let me get this straight,you all spent only two hours in this town,and you've made reputations for yourselves???"Rob asked the three in the bush.
"Yes"they all replied.
"HOW??"Rob screamed.
"Well I stole some candy"Laura replied.
"They thought I worshipped Satan"said Erika.
"They thought I WAS Satan,"Chris said sternfully.
"You did not just call me ,did you?"Rob shouted.
"What if I did fly-boy?"Chris replied.
"Why in the hell did you????"Rob ordered.
"Oh,I saw you earlier"Chris told him.
"So?"Rob asked.
"So,I saw you flirting with Erika"Chris pointed out.
"Flirting,I wasn't flirting,was I Erika?"Rob asked.
"Em...................um.................uh.............no,no,of course not,I mean why would you?"Erika said in a depressing voice.
"SEE!!!!"Rob shouted,still oblivious to Erika's expressions.
"Fine,well, we should be going anyway, we've gotta get out of here,before anyone see's us"Chris suggested.
They all agreed and quickly ran out of Hickory Falls,for good,they hoped.
The gang,had made it to the freeway on which they saw a sign,Laura read it out aloud"Marshall City, 60 kilometers".
"6o KILOMETERS!?!?!"Erika shouted,after which she looked down to the bottom of the sign,on which it said"Yes,it is 60km to Marshall City".
The group stood shocked,reading the sign,"weird"Erika uttered.
As the group hitch-hiked,along the freeway,they began to talk to each other about themselves,seen as they could be spending a very long journey together,they did so,and bonded,suprisingly even Chris and ROb shared some common ground.
After about another hour of hitch-hiking a red and white cadillac pulled up,by the gang.
"Where ya headin'?"asked the driver,clad in a leather jacket,and jeans,with a brown afro(which looked like a wig),and what seemed to be a fake moustache.
"Marshall City"Laura replied.
"Oh,coolio,were heading there too"the second man,clad the same,but with blonde hair(that also looked like a wig) replied.
"Hope on"the driver exclaimed.
All the kids hopped in the back,and the car sped off.
"So,kiddies,what's your names?"the driver asked.
"I'm Robert,that's Laura,Chris,and Erika"Rob said pointing out each person,as he said their name.
"Coolio,well I'm Mac,and this is my good friend Joe"the driver(Mac) replied.
"Please to meet you"Laura said as she smiled at them.
"Oh,the pleasure is all ours"Joe assured them.
The car suddenly took a U-turn at began to drive in the other direction.
"Yo,Starsky,this ain't the way to Marshall City"Chris pointed out.
"I know" Joe replied,as he pulled of his blonde wig.
"Were not going to Marshall City,just yet"Mac replied,as he took off his fake moustache and wig.
"Your,your,those guys from the van"Rob stated.
"No shit,sherlock"Mac replied.
"Now just sit back and enjoy the ride"Joe said to them,as a glass window came down between the back of the car and the front of the car.
Both Laura and Chris tried to open the back doors,but they were locked.
"Erika,make the doors fall off,"Rob ordered.
"I,I don't know how I did it"Erika informed them.
"Well, what'll we do??"Rob asked.
"How the hell should I know,"Erika shouted.
Mac and Joe heard muffled screams from the back.
"Ah,kids,don't ya just love them"Mac said as the car drove off,with the gang trapped in the back.................
Well there she is chapter11,hope ya liked it,please post,also thanx for the post firekitty ^^
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