Untitled Poem of Mine....

[IceBlueWings]

Tell me what you think, please?

I realized so many things,
Only to find out something so new to me.
I have found out that one day, we're all going to end.
And who knows, maybe I'll be the first.
Now, if that was to happen, what will you do?
Will you move on or will you come with me?
Will you be the first to know?
Will you be there to see me leave?
What will you do?

As much as I don't want to leave, it just happens.
I want you to move on, yet I also want you to come with me.
Things are so complicated,
But actually it's simple.
It's us that makes it complicated, by bringing many things into life.
Every step you take, opens a new path.
It ends somehow and someway,
Till then we keep walking.

 

[its_beca]

'Tis interesting, though, rather self contradictory... And the first two lines rhyme while others don't, which sounds kinda silly.

Not my type of poem, but gives ya something to think about.

 

[IceBlueWings]

yeah...haha...im not good at poems anyways....

 

[Niwa]

i like it although i am no good at following poems

 

[LuvKyou]

Nice poem..

 

[its_beca]

yeah...haha...im not good at poems anyways....

It's just something you work on. You'll be awesome if you keep trying. ^^ *gives her a cookie*

 

[Enchanted Rose]

It's quite good actually. You really do need to change the 2nd line though.

 

[rikubaka67]

I liked it. And I'm not that good at poems either.