Hey guys! You might know me, maybe not. Whatever, that's not the point. The point is that Vanitas97 made a fic called 'Kingdom Hearts Three'. I told him if he had an editor it would help him. So, we're working on it. Sadly, I've only edited the first chapter. If you like before and afters, read his first (Kingdom Hearts Three) and then read mine. And HEAVY SPOILERS FOR BIRTH BY SLEEP Because the 7th of September just takes a long time. So, here's the first chapter.
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“Ventus?” A dark voice called out.
The young boy of fifteen, known as Roxas, opened his eyes. Wha-What? I’m awake? He thought. Roxas sat up, but he was defying gravity.
“Yes indeed, Ventus. You are awake. And you know what that mean? I am too.” It was that same dark voice. Where is it coming from? He’s thoughts were filled with anger. He looked on both sides of him. Nothing. Why is he calling me Ventus? I’m Roxas.
“You’re no Roxas; You’re Ventus.” Roxas couldn’t handle it anymore.
“Who are you? I’m Roxas.” He yelled in frustration. He heard a faint sigh.
“Turn around,”
“No!” Roxas replied.
“Dude, just turn around!” The voice asked in desperation. Roxas turned around slowly. There, floating above him was Sora. No, this wasn’t Sora. This boy had jet-black hair and sparkling gold eyes. Who is he? Roxas thought. Suddenly, a wave of memories hit him. He saw two people. Were they his friends? Aqua…Terra? And then he saw his ‘Master’. Master Eraqus! He then saw an older, bald man. Master Xehanort! Vanitas! Is Vanitas the same boy above me? Roxas looked up to see him again. He decided it was so.
“Roxas, heads up!” A familiar voice yelled reaching out for him. Vanitas pulled out the X-Blade.
“Do you see how pretty it is? Since you woke up, it completed.” He smiled. Roxas summoned his Keyblade. But it wasn’t Kingdom Key; this was another Keyblade. Fresh Breese is its name. A soft humming voice whispered in his ear. Roxas quickly blocked Vanitas’s blow. He then hit Vanitas square in the chest. When Roxas made contact with Vanitas, Vanitas disappeared into black and purple smoke. Roxas looked around and didn’t see Vanitas. Vanitas appeared silently behind him. Vanitas picked Roxas up by the collar and flung Roxas in front of him. Roxas flew forward trying to find his footing, but there was no ground. Eventually, Roxas stopped at the barrier of the Awakening. Vanitas was already standing on top of Roxas, X-Blade pointed at his chest.
“What’s wrong, Ventus?” Vanitas leaned close to Roxas’ face. “Your friends finally ditch you? What were their names again?” Vanitas cocked his head to the side. He knew perfectly well what their names were. “Wasn’t the pretty blue haired woman named Aqua? And that phony ‘tough’ guy was Terra? Correct me if I’m wrong?” Roxas stared at Vanitas with anger. Wait. I don’t know Aqua or Terra. Those names felt familiar on his tongue though. This guy, Ventus, knows whom Terra and Aqua are, right? Suddenly, Roxas felt like someone was trying to take control of his body. But Roxas wasn’t going to let that happen.
A rush of memories filled Roxas again. His head hurt. It was like he had been upside down for a day and all the blood and rushed to his head. And then he got a bad cold with a really bad headache. Roxas looked through someone else’s eyes. Ventus. He thought. Ventus knew that whom Vanitas was talking about. They were his best friends. His only friends. But that stupid Master Xehanort had to ruin everything! Even Vanitas ruined everything! It then felt like Roxas was losing control.
That’s not me! That’s Ventus, I know it. Why do I have his memories?! Xion, Axel, Naminé where are you guys? Then Ventus had thoughts of his own. Terra! Aqua! Master Erauqs! Master Xehanort! Vanitas!
“Roxas!” Came the same voice that saved him again. Was that Xion?
“Once you’re out the way, there’s nothing stopping me from taking over your little weak body. I hope it has enough juice for me.” Vanitas whispered in Roxas’ ear.
“I won’t let you!” A black-haired girl with Kingdom Key came down aiming at Vanitas. Xion distracted Vanitas and the two began to fight. Roxas was slowly turning into Ventus, but he still retained his own appearance. Roxas/Ventus spun upward into a standing position. Ventus thought something. Why is Vanitas here? I’ll kill him! Wait. If he’s here, then maybe Aqua and Terra are here! But were exactly…is here?
“Vanitas!” The Ventus part of him shouted.
“Xion!” Roxas shouted.
Vanitas tried to hit Xion, but Xion blocked. Roxas/Ventus summoned Oathkeeper and Oblivion. A Keyblade circled around them. Is that Fresh Breeze? Roxas asked Ventus. You know its name? Ventus asked surprised. Roxas nodded. The White one is Oa- Ventus cut off Roxas. I know their names, Roxas. You have a friend to protect, remember?
Roxas/Ventus raced towards Vanitas. Roxas/Ventus hit him in the back sending him forward to Xion. Xion struck him in the head and Vanitas flew back to Roxas/Ventus. Roxas/Ventus sent a beam of Light towards his face. Vanitas smirked with his eyes shut. Vanitas disappeared. Roxas/Ventus and Xion gasped and became wide-eyed. They put their backs to one another. Vanitas appeared in flashes. He was here, no here, no over there. And then, Vanitas stood right in front of Xion and struck her in the face.
“NO!” Roxas/Ventus shouted. Vanitas tried to run off; stain glass stairs appeared. “You won’t get away, Vanitas!” Light gathered in all three Keyblades. Vanitas kept running upwards. The three Keyblades focused on Vanitas. Roxas/Ventus began running up the stairs. “Never again!” The Light beam was shot off and it caused an explosion. The glass began cracking. Vanitas laid on the breaking glass.
“NEVER AGAIN WILL MY FRIENDS SUFFER!” Roxas/Ventus appeared behind the floating Vanitas. Triple wielding, they slashed through him making and X with a line in the middle. Vanitas smirked.
“You won this round. No matter, I’ll find someone else. I’m sure me ‘dear master’ is waiting on me.” He said ‘dear master’ as though he had to drink a bottle of poison.
“Farewell, Ventus...and Roxas.” He vanished in a wisp of black, red, and purple Darkness.
We should check on Xion. Ventus told Roxas. And we have some catching up to do. Ventus added. Roxas laughed. Yeah, we do need some catching up to do. That was the last thoughts of Roxas and Ventus as they fell into an unconscious sleep within the depths of Sora’s Heart. I guess Xion would have to wait.
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So? What'da think? ...I don't think even Vanitas97 knows that I finished.
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“Ventus?” A dark voice called out.
The young boy of fifteen, known as Roxas, opened his eyes. Wha-What? I’m awake? He thought. Roxas sat up, but he was defying gravity.
“Yes indeed, Ventus. You are awake. And you know what that mean? I am too.” It was that same dark voice. Where is it coming from? He’s thoughts were filled with anger. He looked on both sides of him. Nothing. Why is he calling me Ventus? I’m Roxas.
“You’re no Roxas; You’re Ventus.” Roxas couldn’t handle it anymore.
“Who are you? I’m Roxas.” He yelled in frustration. He heard a faint sigh.
“Turn around,”
“No!” Roxas replied.
“Dude, just turn around!” The voice asked in desperation. Roxas turned around slowly. There, floating above him was Sora. No, this wasn’t Sora. This boy had jet-black hair and sparkling gold eyes. Who is he? Roxas thought. Suddenly, a wave of memories hit him. He saw two people. Were they his friends? Aqua…Terra? And then he saw his ‘Master’. Master Eraqus! He then saw an older, bald man. Master Xehanort! Vanitas! Is Vanitas the same boy above me? Roxas looked up to see him again. He decided it was so.
“Roxas, heads up!” A familiar voice yelled reaching out for him. Vanitas pulled out the X-Blade.
“Do you see how pretty it is? Since you woke up, it completed.” He smiled. Roxas summoned his Keyblade. But it wasn’t Kingdom Key; this was another Keyblade. Fresh Breese is its name. A soft humming voice whispered in his ear. Roxas quickly blocked Vanitas’s blow. He then hit Vanitas square in the chest. When Roxas made contact with Vanitas, Vanitas disappeared into black and purple smoke. Roxas looked around and didn’t see Vanitas. Vanitas appeared silently behind him. Vanitas picked Roxas up by the collar and flung Roxas in front of him. Roxas flew forward trying to find his footing, but there was no ground. Eventually, Roxas stopped at the barrier of the Awakening. Vanitas was already standing on top of Roxas, X-Blade pointed at his chest.
“What’s wrong, Ventus?” Vanitas leaned close to Roxas’ face. “Your friends finally ditch you? What were their names again?” Vanitas cocked his head to the side. He knew perfectly well what their names were. “Wasn’t the pretty blue haired woman named Aqua? And that phony ‘tough’ guy was Terra? Correct me if I’m wrong?” Roxas stared at Vanitas with anger. Wait. I don’t know Aqua or Terra. Those names felt familiar on his tongue though. This guy, Ventus, knows whom Terra and Aqua are, right? Suddenly, Roxas felt like someone was trying to take control of his body. But Roxas wasn’t going to let that happen.
A rush of memories filled Roxas again. His head hurt. It was like he had been upside down for a day and all the blood and rushed to his head. And then he got a bad cold with a really bad headache. Roxas looked through someone else’s eyes. Ventus. He thought. Ventus knew that whom Vanitas was talking about. They were his best friends. His only friends. But that stupid Master Xehanort had to ruin everything! Even Vanitas ruined everything! It then felt like Roxas was losing control.
That’s not me! That’s Ventus, I know it. Why do I have his memories?! Xion, Axel, Naminé where are you guys? Then Ventus had thoughts of his own. Terra! Aqua! Master Erauqs! Master Xehanort! Vanitas!
“Roxas!” Came the same voice that saved him again. Was that Xion?
“Once you’re out the way, there’s nothing stopping me from taking over your little weak body. I hope it has enough juice for me.” Vanitas whispered in Roxas’ ear.
“I won’t let you!” A black-haired girl with Kingdom Key came down aiming at Vanitas. Xion distracted Vanitas and the two began to fight. Roxas was slowly turning into Ventus, but he still retained his own appearance. Roxas/Ventus spun upward into a standing position. Ventus thought something. Why is Vanitas here? I’ll kill him! Wait. If he’s here, then maybe Aqua and Terra are here! But were exactly…is here?
“Vanitas!” The Ventus part of him shouted.
“Xion!” Roxas shouted.
Vanitas tried to hit Xion, but Xion blocked. Roxas/Ventus summoned Oathkeeper and Oblivion. A Keyblade circled around them. Is that Fresh Breeze? Roxas asked Ventus. You know its name? Ventus asked surprised. Roxas nodded. The White one is Oa- Ventus cut off Roxas. I know their names, Roxas. You have a friend to protect, remember?
Roxas/Ventus raced towards Vanitas. Roxas/Ventus hit him in the back sending him forward to Xion. Xion struck him in the head and Vanitas flew back to Roxas/Ventus. Roxas/Ventus sent a beam of Light towards his face. Vanitas smirked with his eyes shut. Vanitas disappeared. Roxas/Ventus and Xion gasped and became wide-eyed. They put their backs to one another. Vanitas appeared in flashes. He was here, no here, no over there. And then, Vanitas stood right in front of Xion and struck her in the face.
“NO!” Roxas/Ventus shouted. Vanitas tried to run off; stain glass stairs appeared. “You won’t get away, Vanitas!” Light gathered in all three Keyblades. Vanitas kept running upwards. The three Keyblades focused on Vanitas. Roxas/Ventus began running up the stairs. “Never again!” The Light beam was shot off and it caused an explosion. The glass began cracking. Vanitas laid on the breaking glass.
“NEVER AGAIN WILL MY FRIENDS SUFFER!” Roxas/Ventus appeared behind the floating Vanitas. Triple wielding, they slashed through him making and X with a line in the middle. Vanitas smirked.
“You won this round. No matter, I’ll find someone else. I’m sure me ‘dear master’ is waiting on me.” He said ‘dear master’ as though he had to drink a bottle of poison.
“Farewell, Ventus...and Roxas.” He vanished in a wisp of black, red, and purple Darkness.
We should check on Xion. Ventus told Roxas. And we have some catching up to do. Ventus added. Roxas laughed. Yeah, we do need some catching up to do. That was the last thoughts of Roxas and Ventus as they fell into an unconscious sleep within the depths of Sora’s Heart. I guess Xion would have to wait.
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So? What'da think? ...I don't think even Vanitas97 knows that I finished.
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