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*Message here, and rate /10, ALL COMMENTS AND RATINGS ARE WELCOME, even minor critisicm, as long as it can make me a better writer, if that's needed. Thanks. BTW, this is my first FF.*
Here are the ratings for the chapters so far:
*Chapter 1: 9/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 2: 10/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 3: 9/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 4: 9/10*
*Chapter 5: NO CURRENT RATING*
During the time of Riku, Sora, and Kairi, while Riku is still in the dark... At The World That Never Was...
Riku sped through the World That Never was, looking...looking...Looking for what? he said to himself as he coninually fought the heartless and nobodies that appeared before him. No one ever learns...that you can't beat the very darkness in every heart.
A particularly large heartless appeared in front of Riku. Riku stopped for a split second, but then threw his blade out in front of him, destroying the beast, and then once again continued along, always fighting, always looking. Yet, for what? It was a question he coninually asked himself, questions, in fact.
It's been a while since I last saw Sora or Kairi...I wonder, have they fallen into the darkness yet? Riku wondered. Always running, always battleing and fighting... I wonder...have they given into their own darkness? There is darkness in every heart, and it's only a matter of time before the person gives into their own darkness, succumbing to it's will, and being engulged forever in it's shadows...
Rain was falling hard now, and the blazing lights, so out of place in the shadowy world, could still be seen through Riku's blindfold. Why does the light have to harm? The darkness harms no one, yet it is suductive. Had Riku given in yet? Or was he still fighting for friendship, and for the reasons he began fighting in the first place? Only I know.
Riku could feel the rain on his skin, dripping down from the hair that hung in his face. His covered eyes gazed over the nightmarish town, always seeking, always needing...always in the shadows.
"Ah, Riku. How glad I am to see you have returned..." A voice spoke from behind Riku.
"Who's there?" Riku asked without much emotion and without turning around.
"You know, Riku. You've always known. I've been inside of you, and outside. You know me, and I know you better than you know yourself." The voice replied triumphantely.
"Only I know myself." said Riku, turning his head slightly in the voice's direction.
Whoever the voice belonged to put a dark, gloved hand on Riku's shoulder. "I am you."
*End of Chapter one. I know, it may have been a little short, but message here and rate /10. Thanks!*
Here are the ratings for the chapters so far:
*Chapter 1: 9/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 2: 10/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 3: 9/10, 10/10*
*Chapter 4: 9/10*
*Chapter 5: NO CURRENT RATING*
Prolouge:
Nothing but darkness can be seen from his eyes as he fights for reasons of his own...During the time of Riku, Sora, and Kairi, while Riku is still in the dark... At The World That Never Was...
Chaper 1: Shadows Unseen
Riku sped through the World That Never was, looking...looking...Looking for what? he said to himself as he coninually fought the heartless and nobodies that appeared before him. No one ever learns...that you can't beat the very darkness in every heart.
A particularly large heartless appeared in front of Riku. Riku stopped for a split second, but then threw his blade out in front of him, destroying the beast, and then once again continued along, always fighting, always looking. Yet, for what? It was a question he coninually asked himself, questions, in fact.
It's been a while since I last saw Sora or Kairi...I wonder, have they fallen into the darkness yet? Riku wondered. Always running, always battleing and fighting... I wonder...have they given into their own darkness? There is darkness in every heart, and it's only a matter of time before the person gives into their own darkness, succumbing to it's will, and being engulged forever in it's shadows...
Rain was falling hard now, and the blazing lights, so out of place in the shadowy world, could still be seen through Riku's blindfold. Why does the light have to harm? The darkness harms no one, yet it is suductive. Had Riku given in yet? Or was he still fighting for friendship, and for the reasons he began fighting in the first place? Only I know.
Riku could feel the rain on his skin, dripping down from the hair that hung in his face. His covered eyes gazed over the nightmarish town, always seeking, always needing...always in the shadows.
"Ah, Riku. How glad I am to see you have returned..." A voice spoke from behind Riku.
"Who's there?" Riku asked without much emotion and without turning around.
"You know, Riku. You've always known. I've been inside of you, and outside. You know me, and I know you better than you know yourself." The voice replied triumphantely.
"Only I know myself." said Riku, turning his head slightly in the voice's direction.
Whoever the voice belonged to put a dark, gloved hand on Riku's shoulder. "I am you."
*End of Chapter one. I know, it may have been a little short, but message here and rate /10. Thanks!*
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