Why does inspiration for poetry almost always resides within the concept of love?

[Cicero]

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Yes, I know.
I joined with joy,
and loved a boy,

a boy who wasn't you.

Yes, I know.
I laughed with insanity,
as well as my pity,

for what could I do?

but cry not with tears,
but utter not by screams,

these meaningless words,
cliches, strings and cords,

I'm tied to you,
I'm tied to you!

Do you know what that means?

Do I?

Stab me now!
Lift me up!
Grab me now!
For I give up!

Why talk,
lie still?
Why whisper,
then leave?

Why scream,
and fight?
Why touch,
yet stay?

I'll talk without diversions,
and say what I have to say;
let light come through this day.

Yes?

Yes.

I will not lose you.

No?

No.

No...because you know that I love you.
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[Darkness Princess]

-tackles-
Dude! I thought you'd left and stuff...
Anyways... that's an awesome poem..I heart it. <3

 

[Siren]

these meaningless words,
cliches, strings and cords,

Not digging that part at all. Fix it.

 

[Cicero]

It does look like the work of an amateur with that line, yes, but I don't care.

Hi, DP...yes, I did leave, didn't I?

 

[Siren]

If you don't care then fine, I'll close this thread and sticky it so that no one can give you crit.

 

[shrekdog]

It does look like the work of an amateur with that line, yes, but I don't care.

even if you don't, you could at least say 'duly noted' or something, and not act like a pompous ass when somebody goes to the effort to critique your shit

and to reiterate, that line doesn't sound too good.

sounds clunky, as do a number of other lines. i'm pretty sure you meant 'chords', too.

 

[TKKB]

one word











great

 

[Who Me?]

Sounds a lot like song lyrics to me.

 

[Cicero]

even if you don't, you could at least say 'duly noted' or something, and not act like a pompous ass when somebody goes to the effort to critique your shit

and to reiterate, that line doesn't sound too good.

sounds clunky, as do a number of other lines. i'm pretty sure you meant 'chords', too.

I already explained it to Tyler, I ment to say I didn't care if it makes me look like an amateur, I did not mean to say I didn't care for critic.

And no, I meant cords, as in the kind of rope thingies. Correct me if that's not the right word in English, 'cause as you might have noticed with the poem, it has been months since I last talked or wrote in English.

Thanks for the comments everyone. =)

 

[Lectori Salutem]

Hiya! It's been quite a while!

Nice one, I like it!

 

[terra2.0]

good work.

 

[Cicero]

Thanks for the comments. ^^

 

[MarluxiaNo11]

I like this, anymore that you would like to share?

 

[Cicero]

I like this, anymore that you would like to share?

My old poetry thread: GJ's Poetry Thread

There are about ten other poems I think, roughly. =)

 

[giuocob]

even if you don't, you could at least say 'duly noted' or something, and not act like a pompous ass when somebody goes to the effort to critique your shit

Oh, come on. Your OFFEDED meter is set way too high.